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Old 01-13-04, 08:48 AM   #1
True-Souldja
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Above Us

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Another death leaves a family weeping,
But know that hes happy forever sleeping,
Whenever thinking bout us look above,
Where we be happy with the endless love,
I only learned to be the heartless thug,
Beauty defined when I die from an 'artists' slug,
But now filled wit emotion Im feeling fraud,
But all I got to do is pray and talk to our god,
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Old 01-13-04, 11:19 AM   #2
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This was good. I liked it. Flow and scheme were both good. You let emotions out. Even thou it was short, it was still nice. Short and to the point. Overall I liked it. Keep it up.

Another death leaves a family weeping,
But know that hes happy forever sleeping,
Whenever thinking bout us look above,
^^fav lines.
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