I know you can follow this, read it:
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I open my eyes....

The beat drops and repeats
Drops and repeats…
Drops and repeats…

I hop to my feet, with no particular motive
Just that lately I’ve noted things, I never used to notice
Now I’m breaking and hating rules I used to abide by
And feel disgust for some things I was often surprised by
I open my eyes wide, for the first time, and observe a weakness
The beat reiterates and everyone is learning the sequence

The beat drops and repeats
Drops and repeats…
Drops and repeats…

It topples the weak, but recently it hasn’t taken muscles to beat
There’s scrawny talent in the stream swimming effortlessly
Artists are making music devoid of ambition to be respected
Careers are cut short, but care less, because longevity is neglected
And we didn’t lose the track; we just lost the train that it runs with
And it’s been waiting to move, we just needed somebody to conduct it

The beat drops and repeats
Drops and repeats…
Drops and repeats…

Were all ignorant to the music, to ones self it’s own
Unaware of the things that need to be made known
I was granted consciousness, and silence is what rendered me
Now it’s clear…
We need to cut the beat short of creating rhythmic tendencies

The beat drops and repeats
Drops and repeats…
Drops and repeats…
…………..click………
And Drops in Defeat

Somewhere the art of words was lost, I’m just hoping I’m not the only one who finds it

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good but we should battle some time ill show you how to rhyme

that was good shit, mite be a lil short but i dont thing u were tryin to put it wit a song but good shit man

Uppin for some actual feedback

Pretty good here... conent was a bit lacking...
However a good flow was here... may sound nice in audio..

I'd like to see sometihng with a deeper meaning...

Good nonetheless....


Peep my shit when you have time
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And we didn’t lose the track; we just lost the train that it runs with
And it’s been waiting to move, we just needed somebody to conduct

I loved this verse right here..mad sick...

Overall this was hot how you re-enacted the chorus here with each verse...Very easy to flow with...had me singing it in my head..alot of people here can't make me do that...alot of props

9.0/10

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Had some nice flow here, some good internals but i thought the bars were a little long but you pulled it off pretty well...Hook was pretty nice, looked liked the hook involved some scratching if ya get me...

Concept was pretty shallow, but i think it was executed well, i was expecting something maybe a little deeper, but we all want to put something out a little more simplistic at times, ya know. Wordplay here was mad dope:

"And we didn’t lose the track; we just lost the train that it runs with
And it’s been waiting to move, we just needed somebody to conduct"[/b[ - couldn't reists adding it, was creative.

[b]3/5 - good shit..only problem, RythmicTendicies® muthafucka!!! lol, j/k...nice drop, keep it up.