Colorful mind's of distortion in view
....the prisoners eye-que...
Poetry and love yet caged, wit a hy-ku
....contempt rage, innocent.. but the lies true
An attempt to finish his last wish
....the final momento, never to be stolen
Heart of love, depart and bluff.. he's folden
....to be alone for days and hour's
To beat the feat's of the highest towers
....ending the fewest cowards
Alone for weeks,days,minutes,seconds
....his last dome.. last home... last place to roam
Where he' resides, where he decide's, where he lyes
....where he cries, thinks,blinks, his home.. where he dies
The image of love,destruction.. he's struck-in with pose
....his final noise.. the paint brush puttin the last coat
Of paint on the wall.. his eyes fall, his leg's cease
....trying to crawl... life isnt this small...
Not at all..

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..Decent piece..nice wordplay..good imagery..good content..keep up..

Yo nice piece. Very good imagery. Nice use of words. Content was good too. Had a relaxing feel to it. Structure very interesting and worked well. Hit me up!

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thanks for the reply, if i get alil time ill hit up ur piece

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i peeped it...i really enjoyed 2/3rds of this piece...the ending seemed to kinda shatter...but it was well written...your style is unique in its own way...congrats on a nice piece..i hope to read more in the future

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