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01-15-04, 02:44 AM
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Practicing Structure
IP:
Redeye On This Open Mic Practicing Structure/
Mc's Batlle Me And Get Their Ear Drums Ruptured/ Style So Crazy Poppin Out A Bush Like A Baby/ Readin These Lyrics Will Give You Raybees/ Headless Like The Horseman/ Stompin Knockin You Off Course Man/ |
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01-15-04, 05:11 AM
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the last bar was off... compared to the rest... also ya rhyming is too basic.... work on complexity and flow....pZ
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01-15-04, 06:12 AM
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IP:
bit short mate but nice try for a new C...need to work on complexity n structure n your flow...But overall U aiiight for a newb...
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01-15-04, 03:29 PM
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Yeah this was ok.....since you were working on structure, it looked ok, but like Dev said work on the last bar, usually try to keep your lines around the same length so its structured good and it does help the flow out....since this was just about structure i wont comment on the others...but keep at it.
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01-15-04, 03:45 PM
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IP:
short practice..this was decent..
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