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Old 01-17-04, 01:27 PM   #1
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Desecration of definitions sends my mind into contemplation
Question the function of one who Rhymes with no ultrior occupation
To Resist Hesitation of Your Mental Elevation
Relinquish Humiliation, commence Your Minds Emancipation
Resucitation of Humanitys Yearn for More Education
Redirect Hellish Years of Monotonous Enunciation
Into Revelation, Hearts Yearn for Moral Excavation
Bustas breaking barriers, overloading emcee infiltration

Deeply into cultural preservation like I'm a preservative
Conservative, ensuring all you cyber flowers have heard of it
I rule like Ja, but I'm not murderous with my pertinence
I'm so prolific my cursors cursin it, so ill that doctors nursin it
So nice with acronyms, I get gassed like flatulence
Then patent it, so sick they padded my walls with matresses
And leave off the last S for satisfactory
N's for needs improvement, afterwards my teachers would ask for me
They replicate mass produced Penskills in third world factories
Last man standing when teams tackle me, and when crews battle me

Flattery gets you everywhere, just visualize and mentally compute it
The most relative aspects and characteristics are 'beautiful' and 'stupid'
Globally disputed standards but none apply when I vocalize
The masses are unable to read your posts like faces exhibiting poker eyes
Who got the royal flush? Blush as I call your bluff to the crowd
Volume settings automatically redefine the slogan play it loud
To rhyme or not to rhyme? The question answered post verse
I'm a sucka emcee deterent, should've posted the warning first

Surgeon Generals Warning: Elderly and pregnant proceed with caution
Victims of overdose on lyrical precision diction occur more often
Plant your feet in his direction, he leaves you in pediatric rehabilitation
Haul dictionaries at your physical at full acceleration
The Executive Branch blessed him with this occupation
Sucka Emcee Deterent, when the alarm sounds step out of his station
And prepare for annihilation and persecution of lyrical stealth
The F.D.A. decrees, being a busta isn't good for your health

Forget R,S,T, my most frequently used letters are F,U,C,K
Fuck the fakers, fuck the haters, and fuck the lovers on V-Day
Fuck nonexistent and unrecognizable recognition
Fuck every mathematics I've been forced to take besides addition
This is a reassertment of my lyrical and verbal capability
It was after my birth, that the Chinese outlawed fertility

Senility shadows the caverns of your skulls ingredients
After my exhibition of stylistic 'en vogue' deviance
Because you'll regret to recall pre Penskills incompetence and inequality
The first male caucasian translation to break it down ebonically
So call me Ebony...please peruse the undersigned:
Residing Humbly Yours, Musically Enclined...


I realize that it's Inclined, but sometimes you have to bend the rules a little....

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Old 01-17-04, 09:04 PM   #2
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..Fuckin uppin..
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Old 01-17-04, 09:37 PM   #3
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Stop uppin this..this should be READ!!!!..

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Old 01-18-04, 01:43 PM   #4
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..What the fuck????..No replies????
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Old 01-19-04, 12:54 PM   #5
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..This shit needs to be read!!!!
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Old 01-19-04, 01:40 PM   #6
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itz read itz shit
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Old 01-19-04, 01:48 PM   #7
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Originally Posted by white_niggaz
itz read itz shit


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Old 01-19-04, 02:20 PM   #8
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Ok check it...
Ok your first paragraph was like wow..a Lot of vocabulary to express yourself..
To many ION endings though…good so far..and unique..

“Deeply into cultural preservation like I'm a preservative
Conservative, ensuring all you cyber flowers have heard of it”
Well done opener…well put you made me as the reader understand..
Deep for a liner..

“I'm so prolific my cursors cursin it, so ill that doctors nursin it
So nice with acronyms, I get gassed like flatulence
Then patent it, so sick they padded my walls with mattresses”

A little miss spellings however nice metaphor and you kept flow..

“Flattery gets you everywhere, just visualize and mentally compute it
The most relative aspects and characteristics are 'beautiful' and 'stupid'
Globally disputed standards but none apply when I vocalize
The masses are unable to read your posts like faces exhibiting poker eyes”

Very ill with the illustration nice fam..nice scheme and flow..

Ok your whole piece was well done..interesting piece threw out..I have other qoutes but this board is acting slow I guess due to the reconstruction..very unique piece and all lines were well worded..

I don't know why heads sleep on pieces lihis...but yeah..great scripts..

peace..
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Old 01-19-04, 03:04 PM   #9
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yo man a shit load of nice fuckin lines in this piece, very sickly ill use of vocab and wordplay although your first verse I thought had to many big words in it took away from the flow but as for the rest of it it was down. flow, multi's, wordplay, structure, and your rhyme scheme was really good lots of complexity. keep up bro peace.

peep my collab with yaz called "Stories of Old" and leave some feedback plz it's gettin slept on bad, thanx in advance.
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Old 01-19-04, 03:04 PM   #10
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very well written or should i say keyed... lots of vocab in there...
lot of ION endsing like said /\ but its all good
rhymin them words so much could make emcees turn pale... lol
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Old 01-19-04, 03:14 PM   #11
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many quotables, packed with multis and complex vocab..your first stanza was the best to me..but thats just preference..it seems more..i dunno how to phrase it.. origional...more you!

*thinks stfu FanTa*

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Old 01-19-04, 06:29 PM   #12
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yo man dis was dope an all, had sum line i liked
alot but da vocabulary seemed a little forced an
ceribral, but overall it was fire
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Old 01-20-04, 10:47 AM   #13
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..thanks for the replies..Keep on coming..
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Old 01-20-04, 01:26 PM   #14
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think ya put to much vocab in it, as some othes have said, but with a bit of thinning out, rewording some of it... it would be good... a decent scheme and complexity.... yeah decent read... i few places could be improved.. but... any drop could be improved....
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Old 01-24-04, 10:56 AM   #15
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Damn I liked your flow in this real good flow and nice punchlines
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