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Old 01-17-04, 10:22 PM   #1
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Soft Focus:The Voices In My Head. Feat Rule

IP:

Emotion:
Wispered Conversations between Me and my alter ego
Pondering on the true meaning of life and watching it grow
Beliveing and conceiving what my conscience tells me is right
Wondering how I started this fight,My Brain turns off like a light
I have to wonder whether the voices are evil or im insane
Watching this pain,laughing at the alter ego that lives in my brain
He give's me options that i submit to a conversation, Understand
That everyone has these voices, It's just a mass array of choices
Who are u voice and why the hell are u so mysterious
It's like u turned me from someone normal to a phycho conspiratous
I am fearing this, that the voices inside me head are hearing this
Plotting my trip to a pycho ward, PLotting lies becausetheyare a fraud
I wonder what caused them and why they are hear, My fear-
Is they will only go away when my family has to shed a tear
The voices driveme crazed, like they are constantly amazed
at my stupidity they blame me for there own idiocy,
Im in a coffin now the voice shut down my private war,
They found me hanging 3 feet above the fucken floor,

Rule:
Rescue my inner confusion an ease my tension of lust
Debat my securities from within on what ego's to trust
Question myself regularily because i'm lost critically
I sit patentialy as my inner self fades away constantly
But if I just sit and listen to the souls in my bones
I may recieve answers for my destiny in unique tones
As I close one eye vision a cloud that'll rescue Mike
Put my hands together and pray for a brighter life
Shiny star an so far ahead of the entire universe
The consisious in my head will elimate the false herst
Rule hides from religion but I believe in god and jezus
Deny talent because faliur creates my life thesis
But the voices in my head know what's be strong
Guide the right path away from the dead an gone
Think so the voices can comunicate the reabilatated
Council denied emotions as the problem is exscalated
I'm lost don't understand pasion who see's the tears?
Graduated talent that's been suffering for three years
Nobody knows my pain or listens..but the voices
They guide me now..help me with all my choices
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Old 01-17-04, 11:18 PM   #2
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woohoo yet another well done soft focus collab, but i didnt expect anything else!

emotion: your part was a good opener to the collab and well written. your imanginary was great.the structure was simple but it worked well, and the rhyming seemed natural and flowed well.

rule: i like how you wrote some what the opposite of his, seeing the voices in a different light, as them being not so bad. your flow was great and vocab too. i liked the ending to your piece, and thought it ended the collab well.

you two did a good piece together, two thumbs up

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Old 01-18-04, 05:15 AM   #3
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lol thanks for replying...I kinda rushed mine and u can notice from a few small errors i had to do it very quickly before i went to work.....
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Old 01-18-04, 11:04 AM   #4
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this was an exellent peice! i think it was well written and well tought out.......... it seems as though you tiik the tyme to just think it out and this came out to be a gud peice........kepp it up! return tha fava n read mine!
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Old 01-18-04, 07:52 PM   #5
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thanks uppin...I will return the faavour..comone....
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Old 01-19-04, 12:43 AM   #6
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I'm sort of on the fence on how I think of it.

On one side, I can totally relate to this peice. I personally have four alter egos. Two of which, are very bad people.

On the other hand, I just wasn't feeling the way you guys wrote this. It seemed very simple and very expository, and there wasn't that feeling inside of it. There was a lot of simplicity, and it wasn't just in the rhymes, but also in the expression. Like you were writing out an essay.

Sorry if it seems harsh, no hate. Seriously.

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Old 01-19-04, 02:22 AM   #7
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mm I Didnt write mine as if i would of if i had more time but i dint I have one alter ego he's funny yet stupid his name is BIlly
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Old 01-21-04, 10:54 AM   #8
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^^still had a dope verse...uppen
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Old 01-22-04, 04:31 AM   #9
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urs was doper...uppin...
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Old 01-23-04, 03:24 AM   #10
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Old 01-23-04, 05:08 PM   #11
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emotion i really liked your piece even though you said it was rushed i think it was better thought out than rules,
dont get me wrong though rules verse was good aswell and this is gonna sound weird but i liked rules verse slightly better even though emotions seemed more thought out.
nice collab

return da favour please.peace
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