14 lines || Topic Given: Std's || Approx.20min-30min keyup
||Peasantry Tryout||
Revenge, Painful & Yet Sweet
Sex was off limits, the happy ties perserved between us
We agreed on the night, this moment world became our brush
Virgin love supply the paint, a relationship built on trusht
Didnt trust on an empty can when i awoke to feel
a cold incresion and and a seccreesion on ma seal
the dark cloud of anger overcast the lights of shock
Was betrayed, virgin paved, the gil i was going to give the rock
took my clock, turn the hands of time on me took winning out ma slots
"looks created, mabey mutated, dont know what we cand do
to prevent passing hold off untill life stifly dooms"
place the keys on the night stand sat down on the can
began to weep tears of open fear, death just cant!
Stood to wash looked out saw a slut i knew through the socket
Grapped a skimask, some cash, pills and put them in my pocket
I know now what she was thinking
When she stole my Virginity
and my Life
...I'll Leave something Special...
...For this World...
Disclaimer:Isnt Personal.

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We hang the petty thieves and appoint the great ones to public office
Aesop.

feed back me plz.

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We hang the petty thieves and appoint the great ones to public office
Aesop.

thought this was an interesting drop.... ya came form a good angle.... and i liked the way you closed it... quite an expressive lil drop... the rhyming was decent... and was carried well.... specially for a key.... so yeah i liked it......