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01-18-04, 08:38 PM | #1 | |
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My Haiku
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My Haiku
I have good skillz No one can stop me ever I will remain good LOL I jus tried some poetry its new to me LMAO |
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01-18-04, 09:07 PM | #2 | ||
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hehehe...........its a gud attepmt.......return tha fava
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01-18-04, 11:57 PM | #3 | ||
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IP:
While its impressive that you are trying new things, this isnt quite Haiku..
The Haiku, or Hokku,use the count 5-7-5. Traditionally Haiku are about nature and generally a 'Haiku' written about people, comedious and other non natural subjects is called a Senryu, to set it apart from the Haiku. Nice first try though
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01-19-04, 09:50 AM | #4 | |
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IP:
Thanks.......I totally forgot about the Haikus are `bout nature.....I learned it yesterday in school!!!!
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01-19-04, 08:42 PM | #5 | |
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IP:
Tourniquet - Well maybe. But Haiku's, according to a man i once knew ,called Kaza (Kazuyoshi) are encouraged in this modern day and age, to be about a broad range of things. Not concentrating on nature. Furthermore, haikus that are witty are also common and encouraged. Though usually with substance. As otherwise after a while, it becomes kind of inane. Unless it's very very clever. Even then, it'll usually have substance.
Er...haikus have penetrated modern western culture. So i don't think purity (in the classical Japanese sense) of them are upheld too much outside those certain circles. And even sometimes within. Another solid attempt. But this was 4-6-5. But as you said, it's your first attempt. There's room for elevation for sure. ...resp.... |
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01-19-04, 09:31 PM | #6 | |
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lmao...I appreciated the "I will remain good"
it actually seemed kind of hopeful =) yeah, but like varen said, subastance is key... I never liked writing them on the nature tip, but thats because I find so little inspiration in nature. we should collab a haiku or something LoL =)
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04-07-04, 04:22 AM | #7 | ||
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IP:
ha ha ha .................noooo don't ever put that sh*t on here again
thanx kkbug
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