http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...09&page=2&pp=15
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=107732
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=107621

Death Is Everything In Life Evil Combined

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-Emerge's Elevation Project

Rap is like a box of chocolates, some are white but most are black
Some are tight but most are whack, some have ‘nuts’ but most lack -Figure Of Speech

ok first thing is first...fix your damn structure

The Ending Storm, Entering The Neverending Form,
Death Takes Last Breaths Without Giving Warn,
Entering Comatose Within You See,
Heaven Or Hell Which Will It Be,
Take a Notion to Breath, But Can't That Was Ya Last Chance,
Death Has Saved You The Last Dance,
I Lost My Girl In 2002,
When I heard She Was Gone My Face Turned Blue,
And Don't Ever Drink Cause It Killed My "Daddy", But You Say Hey Its Fun,
Still Don't Drink Even Tho The Way He Acted You Couldn't Tell If I Was His Son,
All These Events It Happens In Series,
and The Aftermath Of It All Is Just A Theory


/\its really hard for people to read that so drop another open mic...
and this time keep your lines within the same length...then make sure
your bars are lined up right because at first i thought it didnt rhyme
so drop another open mic with structure somewhat like this:

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On What Topic?

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-Emerge's Elevation Project

Rap is like a box of chocolates, some are white but most are black
Some are tight but most are whack, some have ‘nuts’ but most lack -Figure Of Speech