10-14 lines
No dick riding
Spit in 20-25min..

this herbs over, he couldnt spit wisdom losing a third molar
defeat is destined, you've never seen a session
cook this herb in a 100 degrees of Wesson, now I'm a seasoned veteran
hold straight, my foot deep in your ass...we're officially solemates
fools'll plummit when they choose to commit
whats the use of comin'? got me wasting words like tattos on stomachs
you better than me, your of a lesser degree
whos this weak kid? steppin for no good reason
abusive treatments for taking shorts like rookies at nudist beaches
this fools indecent, school and seat him
chew and eat him, check my stool for pieces..dropping jewels this evening
attack systems of rap victims with wack syndromes
you will be defeated..your quite a philosopher
promise to serve, your taking more headshots than a license photographer

..I'm tired of no shows...they should take a L..I sent him few PM's and he's the one who called me out and this faggot is a no show..WTF???

don’t even read what ya wrote, Spit my verse don’t wait for the votes/
I’m leavin you for dead, Come back a week later and find I’m 5 ahead/
I’ll have ya losing “respiration” like Black Star with SARS./
Battling op? Ya whole verse cant even match my worst bar./
ya lines are brittle like an old ladies hip-bone, its like watchin an old lady strip-show/
fuck that whore, putting on a show with something that ive seen a million time before/
this kids got shit flowin from his mouth, quick grab a nurse, nah man, just kiddin, thanks for dropping tha verse/
Cause I still need more prac-tice at recognizing a wack-diss.,
Show the world that I got it and you lack-this/
ive got pages-concerning the stages-of-learning and you at the lowest level/
fuck the wages-you-earning couldn’t match the skills if ya sold ya soul to the devil/
I’m Putting in work as I make-mines, when You just cryin askin when is it break-time/
im Leavin you dead-broke, I Hit you with my best-quote, /
Spittin fire makin you ingest-smoke. Force feed you a deep chest-toke Givin you strep-throat/

Well this was easy. The Soulmate line and the tatoo on your stomach line won easily.

Metaphors-didn't notice any
Flow-Optimus tried but didn't make it
Punches-Penskills

only thing optimus won is some times penskills rhyme pattern was hard 2 find, but Pencil neck won this one. holla at ya kin folk

didnt find this a good battle... it wasnt very consistant... penskills got his, his punches were better, and thats what my voting goes on, so... also it had a better flow going and was more creative... but punches get it.... vote=pen

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this herbs over, he couldnt spit wisdom losing a third molar
defeat is destined, you've never seen a session
opener could have been worded better.. wisdom line was good expected more of a follow through though
cook this herb in a 100 degrees of Wesson, now I'm a seasoned veteran
hold straight, my foot deep in your ass...we're officially solemates
i see what you shooting for with the seasoned line... punch is decent nothing that hard
fools'll plummit when they choose to commit
whats the use of comin'? got me wasting words like tattos on stomachs
im liking this bar
you better than me, your of a lesser degree
whos this weak kid? steppin for no good reason
seemed like more of a filler
abusive treatments for taking shorts like rookies at nudist beaches
this fools indecent, school and seat him
not a bad line.. would have worked on your wording a little bit though
chew and eat him, check my stool for pieces..dropping jewels this evening
attack systems of rap victims with wack syndromes
good multi.. not much of punchs in there though
you will be defeated..your quite a philosopher
promise to serve, your taking more headshots than a license photographer
good ending.. sort of a played concept... punch could have hit harder though

Id say work on a few of you punchs.. you have some iight metaphors.. i thought your flow picked up towards the end, i was feelin it a little more your verse was ok.

don’t even read what ya wrote, Spit my verse don’t wait for the votes/
I’m leavin you for dead, Come back a week later and find I’m 5 ahead/
not much of an opening, not real directed punch
I’ll have ya losing “respiration” like Black Star with SARS./
Battling op? Ya whole verse cant even match my worst bar./
not bad...
ya lines are brittle like an old ladies hip-bone, its like watchin an old lady strip-show/
fuck that whore, putting on a show with something that ive seen a million time before/
follow through seemed like a filler, started good through[/b]
this kids got shit flowin from his mouth, quick grab a nurse, nah man, just kiddin, thanks for dropping tha verse/
Cause I still need more prac-tice at recognizing a wack-diss.,
Show the world that I got it and you lack-this/
bars became overdrawn, but the punch was ok, follow through could have been cut down a little
ive got pages-concerning the stages-of-learning and you at the lowest level/
fuck the wages-you-earning couldn’t match the skills if ya sold ya soul to the devil/
not bad, good flowing, punch wasnt that strong
I’m Putting in work as I make-mines, when You just cryin askin when is it break-time/
im Leavin you dead-broke, I Hit you with my best-quote, /
multi isnt bad here, but lacking a real punch...
Spittin fire makin you ingest-smoke. Force feed you a deep chest-toke Givin you strep-throat/
[b] idea here could use some rewording, ending isnt that good, but isnt total crap either..flow stoped good, but punchs could have came better
Over all your flow wasnt bad, punchs were there.. nothing personal, direction was a little off, got the multis and workin on ya metas i can see..


vote- optimus
he had more punchs, flow was a little more on, more multis in his verse. Penskills did take it with metas i think, butthat doesnt wina battle all the time.

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aight ima have to go wit penskills on this one for better more consistant and harder hittin pucnhes

also his vocab was better and the other guys was to elementary

my vote goes to penskills for a better overall verse better pucnhes and better vocab

hit up the battles in the sig please....if u can both of them

im glad that op claims to not even read that pretentious cocksucker's shit-he gets the battle according to the Big motherfucking Train-money money bling mother fucking BLANGEEZLEO

penskills takes this easily..that tatto on stomach line killed the whle thing for me..he definately wins this match...optimus looks ok but he needs to elevate a lil more and e'd be alot better

v/penskills

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o k that was brutal. The couldnt spit losing a 3 molar was crucial. Unanimous pen skills.

close battle but my vote goes 2 penskills his verse was overall better and his structure was better optimus ur structure was a bit fucked and u need 2 get rid of those stretched ass lines as they were throwin me off....both ad aight punches but penskills gets this 1

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