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Old 01-21-04, 03:44 AM   #1
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I hope you know my goodside's somewhere you wanna get
Fuck wit me bitch I garuntee I watch your every step
Ready set!, Go! the plan take action & gains flight
The lights, make it hard you hafta mantain sight
Snakes attack and hits dont measure softly
See you the victim if you ever cross me
Heaven is awfully, crowded and lofty
I'm tellin you now get off me and
:Never Cross Me:


Sometime ppl underestimate intellegence the rest just hate irrelevance
But it's compellin us & tellin us sell the dust fuck u cause it's hell or bust
We live to die give a try & live our lives, spit the rhymes bout shit & crime
Split second sign where u get to see a mind sick as mine, lines tricky wInd
Continuos grind see what you can find, look to hard I'll see that you go blind
Your outta place outta line fine, you see your daughter? this is the last time
Given names up? your livin day's up, find yourself in a different place stuck
You risen we raise up the division gets played tough, I got a blade tucked
My weapons gripped and fully loaded every clip on my hip is off and slipped
Leave bodies stiff with blood coated limbs & those ones arent off & ripped
Theres many acts you commit irrationally but to me that shit is ever costly
Keep that it mind & if you value ur life at all you simply just never cross me

I hope you know my goodside's somewhere you wanna get
Fuck wit me bitch I garuntee I watch your every step
Ready set!, Go! the plan take action & gains flight
The lights, make it hard you hafta mantain sight
Snakes attack and hits dont measure softly
See you the victim if you ever cross me
Heaven is awfully, crowded and lofty
I'm tellin you now get off me and
:Never Cross Me:
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Old 01-21-04, 03:59 AM   #2
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didnt wanna make it to long........pppl wouldnt read
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Old 01-21-04, 04:01 AM   #3
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man i liked this it was really good...i liked how ya only used one verse it was Pretty Good...ya chorus had strange structure but it was still good man i liked it....so this was really Good Keystyle but your structure in this was good but your lines seemd stretched out...but ya flow was suprisenly Very Good i really thought it was good....keep it droping man....i really think this is a good verse....Peace....
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Old 01-21-04, 06:24 AM   #4
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yeah ur chorus structure was a bit strange but apart from that it was good
"We live to die give a try & live our lives, spit the rhymes bout shit & crime"
(best line)

take a look at my battle an drop a vote. peace
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108195
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Old 01-21-04, 08:54 AM   #5
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Old 01-21-04, 09:02 AM   #6
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Hmm...very nice...excellent vocab...great wordplay..I like the structure of your chours...(it was cool~)..your flow was also very good..what can I say..Very well done..keep up the good work...

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Old 01-21-04, 11:09 AM   #7
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Old 01-22-04, 08:31 AM   #8
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Old 01-22-04, 09:58 PM   #9
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