in the sheer of the night n' cold... fight n' the swole,
is the cry n' the moan... the imprint of the knife in the soul...
well you know that's a little far fetched, and the beginning is,
a little far streched into itself... and the meaning is...
past the present and reverse it... back to the start I mean,
back so far... n' back to the first arm n' sling...
Dec. 31st... should be the best part of the year... but
was the start of the fear of what Steph told Mike first...
Mike enters the park, central... nothing has been said,
as Stephanie sits on the edge of a bench suspensful...
nothing has been told... nothing to show,
slowly up the road... roughly 2 hours after it snowed...
and Mike therefore gives up his coat... to his only love,
nothing above her life... and for this he'd give his own...
I know it seems strange but they are from different sides of the tracks,
but she claims to only love him... n' always have his back...
n back to the story... when he said I love you,
she said I love you too... in comes the worry...
and they kissed on the bench in a breathless manor... she loved it,
so much publically... she even sucked his... whew...
she's only known Mike 6 months... and Steph is caring,
and where every woman wants to be... approaching marriage...
cause she can't live without him... can't breath without him,
can't sleep without him... nor be not around him...
and it so happens... she gave up everything,
every person she ever loved... every person she ever hugged...
every thing she ever held close... ever came close-
to touchin... literally gave up everything for lust and...
when it came to sex n' money... those are the things she hated,
and if he would have been apart of either... she wouldn't date him...
he wanted everything from her... and that's what he gave,
a different way to see the wolrd... "I'll love you... from here to the grave"
and that's what he meant... no one could seperate their relationship,
n' it's painful when... you know it's wrong... but you love the relationship...
you can't pull away from it... and so Steph lingered on...
and all night long... through their love they became one...
no matter the cold... no matter the people walking by,
no matter the how much she tried... could do nothing more than lie...
as blood enhances their union... the path is empty,
and she is in bliss... just to state it simply...
no babies so she had to pull Mike out herself but that was ok,
for she knew... she'd leave him inside of her one day...
and Steph falls asleep there... tired n' worn out,
I love you before she dosed off... last thing out of her mouth...
and the next day she was found right there... right there where she fell,
into a deep sleep... more than any could tell...
she fell in love with mike...
and that's alright but she gave him everything... including her life...
and people read her story... and did it in pain,
from seperate sides of the track...
.......................but Mikes was the other side of Stephanie's vein...









insanely rough draft...


Verbal...

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..Dope..very decriptive piece..I really enjoyed how you expressed your emotions..and the line"Dec.31st" and the follwing bar was dope..great rough draft(although it's excellent as it is)..simply a dope piece..peace...

Pretty nice verse, Av...

Great imagery, deep emotion.

Very solid story.

Makes it seem like I'm in the park, watching from afar.

Dope as dope gets.

I'd work on ya flow, that's about all I tripped over.

Peace

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again I say... insanely rough draft...



but good lookin...

Uppin for Evolve to be "honest" with...

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dope, crazy long and made my eyes hurt, but dope none the less

To Be Completely Honest... The Story Was Entertaining... & Like You Said It Was
A Rough Draft...

The Flow Was On & Off... It Was Kind Of Choppy... & You Were To Repetative With
Your Words.. I Dont See Anything Wrong With Repeating Some Words Over To Get
The Full Effect.. But You Did It A Few To Many Times..

Overall Av.. It Wasn't A Bad Piece... It Was Interesting To Read... But If We Are
Gonna Go Based On Flow.. It Wasnt That Great & Kinda Hard To Follow...

But Hey, What Do I Know.. You Said My Piece Was Garbage & I Actually Thought
It Flowed Pretty Well... Maybe We Both Dont Know What We ARe Talking About...

Or Maybe It Just Flows Better When We Spit It In Our Own Heads...

*slap* Shut that shit up...

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This was cool, like Evolve said it was hard to follow at times, the story got a little confusing. Topic was straight, the flow was good. Everything was pretty good, I'd love to collab with you sometime.

If you could, give me some feed on the open mic in my sig. Thanks bro.

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