As you walk along through your journey you get tired
With times when ya feeling low and uninspired
But you’re still required to maintain some sort’a focus
On the route ahead, cos ya cant plan out the low bits
Its Yin and Yang, blowing both ways without motive
Without notice, manifesting in doses like hypnosis
Controlling your destiny like fate through osmosis
And the membrane is you, through living decisions you hosted
And the rest goes to circumstances beyond your constraint
Just paths colliding like tectonic plates causing complaint
A paradox of possibilities, a syndicate of equal range
That contains all aspects of the equilibrium of change
Cos both sides of the coin combine to one in the same
Self contained in the parallels of the universe’s reign
So it’s not strange seeing consecutive bouts either way
Cos ya take the good with the bad, Quote “your wedding day”
Which accumulates, to a whole to form a perfect mix
1 part of each and the water’s you that’ll bind to fix
So don’t expect a smooth ride, there’s always the hurdle or ditch
That you’ll hit, but it’ll swing full circle like 360 degrees
When it can’t get any worse it’ll reverse and you’ll be free

pretty complex shit yo... lol... I say that because I be writing some simple shit... lol...
It was cool... it had flow and the vocab was definitely strong... you definitely had complexity and you made your point without making it too long... sometimes that complex shit be boring the shit out of me when it's too long... but anyways man, that's my opinion... keep doing your thing man...

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Yeah this was pretty good here man.....everything seemed pretty good in this....i liked it overall.....you had good flow in this, flowed pretty smooth i thought, never fell off...vocab in this was good like it usually is from you....structure was nice in this...content in this was good i thought, liked it....overall a nice piece here man...keep at it.

thnx.... anymore flowing...

Once Again, Everything Was Good In This Piece. . I Don't Want To Get Repetitive. . But Content, Vocab, Structure, Flow, All Were At Their Normal With You Dev. . Complexity Helped You Get Your Point Across Better Without Making It Too Hard To Understand. . Overall, Good Piece. Pz.

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as always entertaining

Complexity:Good
Flow:GOOD
Multis:None
Metaphors:OK

Overall It Was Good Kepp Goin MaN

ROTFLMFAO..... Ok fatal... i dont use multis,,, dumb ass!!

come on,, quit sleepin...

This was a great piece...Very smooth flowin an easy to read...

Its Yin and Yang, blowing both ways without motive
Without notice, manifesting in doses like hypnosis
Controlling your destiny like fate through osmosis

that shit right there was ill......very complex....i say that cause im more about emotion than complexity but over all its a very good piece....cant say anything bad about it....hit me up anytime.....peace.....

thnx man.... any more