babygurl when im not wit u// i feel i got the flue//
what else can i do//i stoped chillin wit my crew//

but babe u must understand//i dont want to be ur friend //
i want to be wit u till the very end//

babe i luv u so and notthat other hoe //
i jus want u to knoe//now please listen to my flow//

ill give u any thing even my 24,s//
and my new clothes//.


now u knoe i luv u this luv i so true

tihs was ite. not deep enough thou and you gotta improve on your flow. the last line really didnt rhyme at all. fix it up and it should be good. keep it up..

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Crazy spit, her shyt be emaculate...oNe

iight thankx....

......i got u

choppy flow, and i say this alot,, basic..... and way to short... read other peoples, see how they do it.....

What the fuck was this????...wheres the rhyme???

That was horse dump

^ lol, leave better feed.

This wasnt all that good....but the intention was there....you need to use some better content though...if your gonna write about love, try writing about how she makes you feel or why you love her something like that....but keep at it man .

yo

...thanx..

i kno it wont good so imo try sometin better