In a state of dilution in confusion as to what is real
What’s the deal, is it what I feel or is that the illusion
Either way its consuming too much time, so im assuming
That it’s the one with best memories, that’s my conclusion
So I don’t want it proven, or debated or run over by IQ
For me it’ll do, im content, to be naïve and see it through
A unique view, out the eyes of my inherent addiction
In a world of abusers drinking and pop’n pills on prescription
With permission by the authorities to take n fake a script
So in my eyes it’s acceptable to drop shit n roll with it
On a regular prevalence, don’t commit tho consume a bit
But I permit, its my choice to make like “shall I take a hit”
None of your business, what is this, do I tell you when to shit?
It’s my world and im in it til it dissolves into the abyss
Cos I wanna reminisce, bout good times, I wanna live it all
Don’t wanna die an old man that’s done nuthin but crawl
Im a young man running for the haul of living enthralled
By the opportunities to enter into that different world
Where aches and worries are wiped out by concocted assistance
And my low resistance to a doorway to beyond the listed
The suit’s, plumbers, bricky’s, dentists, cos im mentally gifted
Run on amphetamines to let my screams be ranked unlisted
So unlived it, that’s the dream, concurrent world set in my mind
Where it’s undefined by reality, a catarax deeming me blind
To the hardship and destitution of the 21st kind
Cos im too entwined in my own zone like a creeping vine
Cos like wine I ferment with drugs n alcohol to form my life
And I live it in a dream, never knowing which will turn out right….

damn....this piece had very nice flow the entire way through....i also especially enjoyed the first 6 lines...started it off great...another excellent piece from Dev....keep up the good work homie......

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I agree this was a good piece here.....the flow in this was real nice, it flowed pretty smooth i thought through out the piece....vocab was good as it always is from you lol...the content in this i thought was good, made a good read....overall this was a nice piece....keep at it.

thnx credz n diverse... ill be sure to hit yours up......

stop sleeping.....

Tight drop man... vocab and flow were always on point...
Good subject... like the way it was expressed...
Real nice man... enjoyed reading it...

Great piece you wrote. The flow was good, along with the structure. tyou had a good rhyme scheme, nice multies. i enjoyed this line


Don’t wanna die an old man that’s done nuthin but crawl
Im a young man running for the haul of living enthralled

I really liked that line...hit hard..creative...very meaningful...great piece...

if you could...hit up something in my sig...thanks

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Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
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eventually some replies.... thnx for those... appreciated...

i thought i responded 2 this.......damnit i need 2 stop drinking. Good drop man as usual it was dope

thnx man.... ya dunked bum......lol

I liked the topic choice. The flow was really good. So was the rhyme scheme.
I rate this a 9/10.
Keep Dropping.
peace.

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yea real tight piece, nice flow vocab,
you basically had everything in there
ya needed. 8/10. nice spit