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Old 01-28-04, 03:04 PM   #1
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The Tree

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A seed, sits in it mother womb, awaits upon birth,
Grows to a tree from a leaf, amounting to the worlds greatest gurth,

links to the first time it was planted, were quick to be lost,
Too much that it had demanded, that it's history would be tossed,
Cradled as it was young, its high hopes were a mere breeze,
It was smaller than all the other trees, succombed to mere pleads,
It had been set in the rugged soil, too tough for most to survive,
Derived from deep in itself, attacked its family with suprise,
He was an edition of his father, just completely revised,
Captivated anything that had looked in its eyes,
Hence, there were difficulties that went with the job,
Some of the branches that were growing were pissed off slobs,
But that came with the territory, and to crucify them was mandatory,
They tried to break off, but the tree kept its poise and glory,
And that was just one of this tree's many problematic stories,
Next thing he knows, other trees want domination of the forest,
Some intelligent and strong, others weak and porous,
But this tree, being untouchable in every aspect,
He defeats them all and most branches remain of out a casket,
But peace and freedom, can't remain for long,
Some branches begin to complain that the tree isn't that strong,
They get this message out through speech and group written songs,
The somber beginnings, being taken away by cons,
So now the tree, remains the biggest of all the Oaks,
Yet it remains to be known as the lands biggest oaf...

So as I piece this out, the Great United States through a tree,
See if you can figure out which events, were relevant,
Believe that it could have been created seldomn spent,
In which case, why would most people be malevolent,
No American scape-goat to blame the worlds bad sentiments,
In God We Trust, and I believe that is Heavens Scent..
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Old 01-28-04, 03:24 PM   #2
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Ahem..don't sleep...
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Old 01-28-04, 03:31 PM   #3
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another dope piece by the leader of the most thuggish crew in the net...great imagery used on this piece..you had a great opener..this piece was patriotic??...you flowed through out the whole rhyme and this was simply another piece from you..peace...
.."I post O.M's in EI"..LOL~~but you can do that..cause we N.O.G's..what!!!
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Old 01-28-04, 04:52 PM   #4
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lol..I really did put this o.m in ei by accident lol..hey upping this for someone o nominate for legends or that monthly thing..hehe..
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Old 01-28-04, 05:00 PM   #5
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very interesting topic and switch to the story...i enjoyed it...couple things i might have changed, but overall nice piece....i enjoyed the analogies with the seed.....

good piece keep writing

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Old 01-28-04, 06:51 PM   #6
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thought it was an interesting topic... and ya came at it from a good perspective,, an thought that the syllable count was perfect, to carry the flow.... that with the content, make this a decent drop, well worth the read..... return the favour
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Old 01-28-04, 08:29 PM   #7
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Uppinf for everyone to see my fucking tree..
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Old 01-28-04, 08:31 PM   #8
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Old 01-28-04, 09:58 PM   #9
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Thanks for the quality feedback...
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Old 01-29-04, 09:59 AM   #10
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Old 01-29-04, 10:38 AM   #11
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nice.....enjoyed the read and the interesting story-line...good job. :}-~
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Old 01-30-04, 09:02 AM   #12
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No..go away with these fucking feedbacks whore heads...
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