Just My thoughts man............

why is it that my flow is tight and niggas hate that/
why nigga talk sideways and expect me to take that/
They think they invincible like no sweepim them up/
But I mean look at the name j be heatin'em up/
come on be for real show me the best ya got/
And I promise I'll stop ya flow like a blood clot/
listen I spit heat that'll make the devil perspire/
and make dudes on top wanna go a level higher/
Dudes quick to give you "what up" then shit on ya name in the street/
for them I aim at they grill cuz they cant talk junk if they cant speek/
(freestlye for real)
But i know it aint where it should be i just wanted to post

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Take That with ya........

Your flow isn't tight and "Niggas" don't hate that.

You need to do something on an actual topic.. No one wants to read a "Super iLL off the dome internet text freestyle".. You must have something in your life you want to speak out for/against.. Something to get off your chest anonymously? It's quite a good outlet if you use it.

Self proclaimation =

Anyways it was meager at best and you need to lose the "/" at the end of your lines. . There is no need for that. . Don't try and include punchlines in your open mics.. Especially wack ones at that.

Elevate. zp.

eripsni-

Yeah i totally agree^.....structure was ok in this, just needs a touch up in a few spots.....you had some multies, but try adding some better ones to this to make it more complex....flow was ok, it fell off at some points though....didnt really like the content....but keep at it.