This is a real life story, of how unprotected sex can fuck up lives. Fuck a hook on this...peep it. Peace

My revelation of how sexual penetration can cause incarceration
Sittin back in the lab swaying with so much frustration
Thinkin of how home boy bit the bullet and didnt use protection
Graphical images of shorty gettin blown from dudes erection
Caught up in the intersection when she said she was pregnant
Took me by suprise that my brother didnt even think for a second
To strap his weapon before he bust, now the consequences will be fatal
Fuckin in the back of an alley makin shorty feel so disgracefull
Diminsh her dignity, homey was with me when he got the call
9 months later the baby was born causin the whole family's fall
I saw his eyes as his son looked back at his face
For one minute a wonderful place as he encouraged his race
But soon the doctor snatched the baby and ran some tests
And shorty started cryin hysterically coz she knew what was next
An hour waiting in the hospital twistin up his braids
The doctor broke the news silently.."Your son has aids"
A look of horror embodied his spirit as he fell to the floor
Because he was infected to because shorty was a whore
It wasnt all her fault he should have used some protection
And three months later caught him out in the streets with his weapon
Sellin drugs and claimin thugs because the baby needs clothes
All the time this infection eatin him, killin his soul
A whole family, Father, Mother and son
Gonna be killed soon because poppa, he never used one
And after sellin crack he goes home to his infected wife
Looks his dyin son in the eye, use a condom, its not worth your life!

Very nicely done, when I read the title I thought Oh boy another love story or another keystyle about how much my dad hates me because I wasn't supposed to happen...but this was actually very original. Nice flow kept it moving, interesting imagery at times, nice wordplay. Overall 8/10 keep it up dog

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Yeah this was pretty good here....you had some good structure in this....your vocab seemed pretty well i thought.....the flow in this was pretty good, it stayed on point through out the piece....the content i thought was pretty well written as well...keep at it.