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Old 01-31-04, 07:14 PM   #1
da-one
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From: fayettenaum NC
just something#3

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im the best of the best and the first of the first
you are less of the less and the worse of the worse
my verse is a curse and a injection
i kidnap Bill Gates kill the internet and make lose ya connection
im on top and never fall like i keep parachutes
im so tough if you walk on me you'll tear up ya shoes
i keep niggas in checc like nike's
me and my crew close like legs and tight jeans
i guess i might be unstoppable
mt.kilamanjaro killin mc's with these rhymes and i aint feelin the sorrow
im untoppable im the illest from shaw road
bomb on dudes like Pac would do
able to run any obstacle
i give damage through words that send cats to the hospital
cash i keep a poccetfull
eightball corner poccet fool
you wanna stop it the white ball will knocc out your soccett
my nine milli shoots out a roccet tool
i keep things short and straight to the point
and locc you down like the jakes when they send you straight to the joint
hate whats the point?
money? give me some more like that old Busta joint
why must ya front claimin your thug
your true color shows when im aiming a slug
coward you really yellow like tweety bird
im money hungry so they say im greedy served
im leavin dudes mad and hatin cus they wanna be me
even if they had 20/20 with urkel glasses they still wouldn't see me
except on t.v. or on the cover of my cd
i was born to rap like my mother was mtv


mybad i aint know we get one open mics a day
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Old 01-31-04, 07:34 PM   #2
inspire
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From: Lexington
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Originally Posted by da-one
im the best of the best and the first of the first
you are less of the less and the worse of the worse

^Your wacker than wack.. Matter of fact.. You wacker than that!

Quote:
Originally Posted by da-one
even if they had 20/20 with urkel glasses they still wouldn't see me

^If you had 20/20 vision glasses would actually impair your vision. Try putting on someones glasses that you know, it won't help your eyes at all. Just to let you know.

Seriously, learn how to spell. Type it up in microsoft word and use spellcheck. It isn't that hard. Also, punchlines really have no place in Open Mic unless they are witty and actually add some value to the piece. They DO NOT add value if they are played as fuck. (See below)
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i keep niggas in checc like nike's
^Please, that is horrible. It may have been nice the first 20 times I heard it.

Find an actual topic to write on.. This "gankstuh gully all about my nine millimetre chrome glock" shit gets annoying. Find something you're passionate and write about it.

Lose the smileys as well.. Open Mic is about the topic, not how many smileys you can incorporate into your piece.

Elevate.

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