hatas can get ya for ya papas the second ya blink
enemys will pop ya and want give you a second to think
unload a whole clip on ya then they jet from the scene
yall need to listen me to yall my message is clean
dont blink cuz ya freinds will turn into ya foes i learned from that
they paccing heat that will burn into ya clothes like a perm on scalp
these days ya cant even trust ya family
this is insanity what else can it be
we moved off shaw road to live on pamallee?( right up the street not a good place neither)
blink once and the one you chill with will stab you in the bacc
needed money so he set it up to having yo ass jacced
shit like that hurts like a spasm in ya bacc
they'll run and snitch to the police so they taddle and rat
ya friends(enemys) hide in the dark
they just playing a role and got hired for the part
and hatas got a desire for ya art
now you dont know who to love like someone put pliers on ya heart
neither one really wants you to be successfull
so to them all of that shit is stressfull
slugs! they wouldnt mind sending you a chest full
until the day you gone is the only time they'll be restfull

DONT BLINK!!!!!!!

What has Open Mic come to....Your flow was atrocious...and you lacked any significant multies, metaphors, and wordplay...Your subject was same old, gangster style...typical...Your structure needs to be fixed, your bars are stretched and didnt help the flow..and your vocab was below average. You needa straighten up your bars and try to put some multies in your pieces, along with larger vocabulary.
Please return the favour.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...637#post1147637

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Otherwise known as Artikulate