Alright this is a led zeppelin song that im adding my own few verses (with some of their lyrics) because I feel this song best captures how I feel right now. Oh ya their part is in italic

Oh Baby!

My Eyes Start To Water, As I Sit And Wonder Why Should I Bother..
As The Day Rolls On, I Feel The Rain Come Down On Me Even Harder..
Start Pacing Even Faster, As I Sit And Wait Until The Rain Is Gone..
Waiting For Her Yet She’s No Where To Be Found, So I Sing This Song..
Just Hoping She Comes Along, And Finally Make Everything Alright..
And If You Finally Come Into Sight, I Won’t Be Angry Won’t Even Fight..
Just Stand Here Waiting, And Give You The Benefit Of The Doubt..
You Make Me Wanna Shout, But I Don’t Even Know What It’s About..
Caught Me In The Hype, So Here I Just Sit And Write Until It’s Alright..
Starting To Get Dark, And I Stand Here Until Theres No More Light..
Then I Wait By The Warm Thoughts Of Your Touch, Your Loves Essence..
In Which I Find When I Look At You, Just Waiting For Your Presence..
Just Waiting For Your Presence..

And My Body Starts To Quiver, My Mind Starts To Run, But From What..
Just To Hear Another “But”, But Here I Am Waiting For My Next Cut..
Oh Baby, Why Don’t You Just Come And Put My Mind To Ease..
Because Right Now I Could Cut The Tease, By Just Paying Some Fees..
But Girl Please, Just Show Up And We Will Make Everything Alright..
And I’m Waiting Here In The Night, Just For You To Bring Me Light..
Cuz Your Smile Really Gives Me A Fright, But Here I Sit And Shiver..
Waiting For Love To Deliver My Chance To Really Sit Up And Giver..

Now I will stand in the rain on the corner,
I watch the people go shufflin' downtown.
A-nother ten minutes no longer
An' then I'm turnin' around 'round.
An' the clock on the wall's movin' slower,
Oh my heart it sinks to the ground
An' the storm that I thought would blow over
Clouds the light of the love that I fou__nd, fou__nd.

Now Here I Am A Fool In The Rain, Not Even Worried About My Pain..
Cuz It’s All The Same, I Just Sit And Wait, For The Next What’s Her Name..
Then I Run Until Im Breathless, When I’m Breathless I Run Until I Drop..
Standing On This Corner Just Waiting For This Crazy Game To Finally Stop..
But It Don’t Stop, Until Love Beats Me Down, But I Still Wait For You..
Cuz I Have No Reason To Doubt You, As I Stand Here Feeling Blue..

Just A Fool Caught Waiting For You, This Aint The First Time..
Just A Fool Caught Waiting For You, This Aint The First Time..
Just A Fool Caught Waiting For You, This Aint The First Time..
Oh Baby..

Ooh now my body is starting to quiver
An' the palms of my hands gettin' wet oh.
I got no reason to doubt you baby,
It's all a terrible mess.
An' I'll run in the rain 'til I'm breathless,
When I'm breathless I'll run 'til I drop, hey!
An' the thoughts of a fool's gotta count,
I'm just a fool waitin' on the wrong block ohh-yeah.

Hey now. Ohhh__-hoh~hohh.
Light of the love that I found.
Light of the love that I found.
Light of the love that I ...
Light of the love that I found.
Light of the hey now. Light of the hey now.
Light of the love that I found.
Light of the love that I found.

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this was nice...i liked the lyrics

a bit basic but better than your usual drops...watch your syllable counts
it threw the flow off in some areas...i was trying to spit this on a beat
and most of the time it was coo...but at times it was way too long...
keep it up gangsta

it works better when you spit it to the actual song.. then you can understand how the flow of the song goes.. but thanks for the feed

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This was a good read..nice
And easy to read..flow'd well
Together..cuz of tha multies
In tha middle sometimes..yea
Pretty basic..but its good like that
never heard tha song..i don't think
But i imagine it goes good with it
Radical Drop!

Word, this was nice, .. audio sounded better i spose, still nice work man , .. very enjoyable, u got some potential man .. props.

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Fuck you

uppin for more feed

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A simple concept but a creative approach.
Very different from the sometimes poetic piece here in Open Mic.
Relating to this piece is easy & readin and completely grapsin the essence, is fairly simple.
Which works well the topic.
It should sound well as a audio.

Return the favour?

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