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02-07-04, 04:10 PM | #1 | ||
Must Be Bingo, I-1
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Am I Hip Hop
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OutWrite Productions
Set Trip, Enjoy Im Trying To Decide If Hip Hop Is For Me Reach The Title Of Don, Or Fall Out The Family Tree See To Me, These Rhymes Dont Mean Nuthin Any Body Who Wants'em Still Aint Close Enuff To Touch'em Got My Heart Pumpin, Standin Behind A Mic But My Rhymes Are Backwards Me, Still In My Mind So I Shake My Head, Till My Brain Falls On The Desk Stab The Pencil Thru Its Chest, Like "You Write The Rest!!" I Can Pull Him Out When Needed, Put Him Right Back Sometimes He Rhymes Till We Destroy A Whole Track Wind It Back, You Know I Aint Init For The Money But One Day My Rhymes Will Sell Like Crack Or Sumthing Or Maybee I Reach To High, I Fall And Miss Then Still Have To Wait In Line Cuz I Aint On The List I Still Cant Find The Line To Write A Decent Rhyme When All I Do Is Smoke And Waste My Fuckin Time Am I Hip Hop, Or A Fan Without A Plan Or Plot Am I A Mouse Or A Man, Will I Use What I Got Will I Blow Up Soon, Will - I - Make The Moves Will I Make My Self A Fool? You Betta Stay Tuned OOoo
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02-07-04, 04:17 PM | #2 | |
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IP:
waddup homie
not bad verse.. not spectacular either but i liked the way it was written feeling you on the content 'So I Shake My Head, Till My Brain Falls On The Desk Stab The Pencil Thru Its Chest, Like "You Write The Rest!!" ^best lines for me flowed well etc bla blah.. seen you do beter but i take this was a key? |
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02-07-04, 04:25 PM | #3 | ||
Must Be Bingo, I-1
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IP:
A Very Stonded Key
I Was So Damn Stoned And I Couldnt Quit Goin Thru The Lines In My Head SO I Wrote Them Down Thought It Flowed Pretty Well Wattup Fgee - Yea Your Right, Ive Done Better...
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02-07-04, 04:34 PM | #4 | |
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IP:
some of the lines didnt rhyme, although the images you came up with in places were mad creative, i guess weed can help and hinder an emcee. i think you should add some multis and pick a creative topic to put that imagery or yours in.
keep writing and peep my piece please, its called "the resurrection" |
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02-07-04, 04:38 PM | #5 | ||
Must Be Bingo, I-1
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IP:
U Aint GOt A Midwest Accent Either
I Bet U Read It Like I-Ther Huh? Naw Its All Good, It Was Honestly Something I Was Gunna Try Audio Just Wanted A Lil Exposure and What Not To See If It Goes Aight
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02-07-04, 05:05 PM | #6 | |
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IP:
This verse was ok. The flow was easy. Decent read. Topic was ok. It was about average. The only thing i'd say is rhyme scheme needs work in a couple parts. Besides that, it was cool. Keep droppin.
Please drop feed here: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=112603 |
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02-07-04, 05:52 PM | #7 | ||
Must Be Bingo, I-1
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IP:
Top Heavy
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