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02-09-04, 11:13 AM
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"The Eleete"
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Foresight...(The Mirror)
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Foresight (The Mirror)
Written By: ELEETE I stare into to the mirror cloaked by the darkness of shadows The tears run, reminded of the losses of numerous lyrical battles My mind painstruck by the anger an hate of all who oppose me Wish I could dispose of these ho's with this flow that I speak I glance in the mirror once more tryin to regain my composure To get rid of this fear an release myself from enclosure I’m bottled up, ready to release my rage on the world But nervousness takes over an spits back the butterflies ina swirl Sweat drippin’ just thinkin bout it makes me sick to my stomach My soul plummets, my feet start tinglin, an my hands numbin Im almost ready to go, the loss of my patience is near I think back on the MC's that inspired to get me here I thank "Skills" an the damage he does witta "Pen" Touching the souls of others, help releasing emotions within The "Man" who's imagery flows like the water is "Free" Inspiring a new approach, a different way to release me An last but not least, one who comes so "Perfect" through "Words" One that’s known as the greatest but never criticizes the worst I think I’m ready to go, I take one last glance in the mirror Now not even the darkness can keep me from seeing things clearer This is my music! This is my passion! This is my lust! Fuck it i'm ready...I walk out the door...then it shuts......... Last edited by ELEETE : 02-09-04 at 11:29 AM. |
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02-09-04, 11:22 AM
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IP:
This was your best piece...
Nice to see youve broken away from the love stuff... This is so much deeper than your other pieces... And you included the dope OM heads... Pen, Word and Me... Its gotta be good with us included... Lol... Flow was on... It always flows so much better in smaller font methinks... Vocabulary was decent... Topic was good... Should of been called, 'Inspiration'... Maybe... But its all good... Keep dropping... Your getting better... Keep going... Pz... |
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02-09-04, 11:34 AM
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IP:
yea another good peice ellete, keep dropin your om's coz i like readin then.
flowd well and good topic. keep it up out |
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02-09-04, 11:43 AM
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 ..that line alone made this a classic...but..sadly..there are people who disagrees...  |
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02-09-04, 11:51 AM
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IP:
i gotta give props when they due, that was a hot verse eleete.
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02-09-04, 03:28 PM
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"The Eleete"
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Thanks all of you............this is a change of style for me so i hope you all like........i like the comments so far........thanks again!
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02-09-04, 05:49 PM
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Flyweight
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IP:
yo homie.....like u said one of ur best, tho u may have switched up ur style u still got it n came wit dopeness...the emotion was all ova this piece n i like the new style...hope to see more of this style in the future n keep rhymin wit ur heart n emotions not wit ur dick n head(wanna b hardcore rappers)
thanx fo peepin my shit homie Peace
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02-09-04, 07:16 PM
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Flyweight
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IP:
nice flow....high level vocab thru out...very nice structure...nice style switch out....coming with more multis than before...keep it up man...you just dont fall back...haha....pz
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02-09-04, 08:08 PM
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IP:
yea like i sed earlier nice spit ma man, ya keept this deep which i like. ya came well in the verse. flow was good and also i liked the structure. vocab was ok. keep it up.
can ya vote on the battle under my sig thanks!! |
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02-10-04, 09:21 AM
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"The Eleete"
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^^Uppin^^
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02-10-04, 11:33 AM
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Eddy.
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IP:
This was good, nice vocab flowed nicely, concept enjoyed me, ..
This is my music! This is my passion! This is my lust! Fuck it i'm ready...I walk out the door...then it shuts......... Iite finisher.. keeep it up. =)
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02-10-04, 01:08 PM
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dope, it reminded me of that moment in 8 Mile, where Eminem raps in front of the mirror prior to his establishing battle..it had a real vibe to it, i loved it, it showed how psyched up people can be and displayed the hatred and confidence you felt in yourself but also, nervousness, to a small degree..it was dope, and i loved it.
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02-10-04, 01:29 PM
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Let it be known...once was is not what is when what aint becomes what will. Nice piece. The scheme as well as the word usage was nice. The topic was hot. U cant go wrong with depth pieces. One
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02-10-04, 03:15 PM
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"The Eleete"
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^^Uppin^^
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02-10-04, 03:24 PM
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Flyweight
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Minor flow issues like rhyming "me" with "speak" but overall good. Vocab is once again adequate. Nice emotions interspersed. I think the closer could have been a little harder though. The second to last line was good but the last kinda went backward. Nice work - keep writing.
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