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02-09-04, 02:53 PM | #1 | |
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the names big-j and i aint here to brag
i aint tryin to piss you off or make you mad people diss my rap skill all the time before they get chance to hear me ryme yea i talk a lot of shit but i can back it up like when i tell ya to ya face me and your bitch like to fuck for you little people that talk a lot of shit us fat people gather all our spit you heard more cushion for the pushin well us fat people have more dick for the chick now im gonna hand it over to my friend in the click this teflon I spit crazy flows that these hoes love ta swallow blow ya ass into peices wit a clip fulla hollows right now u fuckin wit da wrong clique later on u be at the crib suckin on my dick im not tha type ta play games kiil u witout given a fuck about ya name teflon tha supreme king tell ya girl im over our little fling |
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02-09-04, 06:47 PM | #2 | ||
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IP:
you need to carry the rhyming further and elaborate on ya scheme its basic... introduce some internals.. n flip it around a bit... it will add to the read... its no good jus having a good content... which in this case was ok...
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02-10-04, 03:48 AM | #3 | |
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IP:
^^^^^^^^^^
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02-10-04, 10:36 AM | #4 | ||
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IP:
Yeah this was alright....like dev said add some internals or some multies to this to make it more complex, it was simple rhyming....try working on some better content as well, something maybe you can relate to....but this was ok overall....keep at it.
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