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Old 02-10-04, 02:25 PM   #1
THE DALABIL
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Spiritual thoughts becoming complex as i spit the ray of light told to obey or fight the unnatural is the seen life reincarnated in my example of Christ So I digress and manifest on this mic check to leave you truly blessed born to the world for the purpose of passing a test to proclaim to all "Keep it happy when you're poor in the spirit" and when you see me or mine...stand, clap and cheer it! Repent RB its the Kingdom and you are now near it...wherever you are in the world at this moment reading this you are on Holy ground and you'd better fear it! Every single day, every single time I pray, its all about His glory, His will and His way. I AM THE DA-LA-B-IL, B-I still? B-I real! B-I flawless? B-I've killed! B-I raw at this B-cause B-I've lived carrying my cross up hill. Dirt roads filled with big rocks. With no shoes no life and no jam box. Cut off from listening to Biggie and 2Pacs. Only the spirit of what it is that I hip hops but I had the nerve to sneak a couple of "It dont stops!" A couple of banging head-knocks on dats in my jeans-no sag-in the back pockets. The Mavs, The Lackers, The Kings and the Rockets. My citys anger over Vanilla Ice and his flopped hits. You guys' Kennedy '63 mess that you refuse to forgets and my old school poster of Pam Grier's tits.

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Old 02-10-04, 02:33 PM   #2
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sice you took the time read all three parts of my story...I'm returning the favor...you actually had a nice flow and wordplay going...only problem was your struture..It made it very diffcult to follow..start lasying your bars out...that's about it...peace..
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Old 02-10-04, 02:44 PM   #3
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Wow this was pretty good..........most newbs are pretty weak when they first come........but this wasnt too bad.....the structure made hard to follow but im sure with time youll work at it.....i liked for the most part.........you can only get better........keep at it an keep doig your thing.....dont pay attention to what haters say........keep at it dawg.......holla!
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