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Old 02-12-04, 03:36 PM   #1
rasta_masta_247
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flow

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yo yo yo yo yo lets go
this is me new flow
all u nigaz wud wanna c me show
it is all cumin 2geva startin to grow
it jus wnt go ye its me new flow

5 4 3 2 n 1
now im done, gone
u wnt find me i left without a trace
no1 saw me cuz covered my face
see im just 2 cleva like dat
they no i gone n wnt be back
new lets role the tape back
i shot a man hu was not black
cuz he dissed me mates way
see hu shudnt of cuz he had 2 pay
not wid money but wiv a shot in the face
he did not die but looks a discrace
so u now know wot this is
this is me new flo

yo yo yo yo yo lets go
this is me new flow
all u nigaz wud wanna c me show
it is all cumin 2geva startin to grow
it jus wnt go ye its me new flow

Last edited by rasta_masta_247 : 02-12-04 at 03:39 PM.
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Old 02-13-04, 12:09 PM   #2
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reply man i need 2 no wot ya think
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Old 02-13-04, 02:50 PM   #3
rasta_masta_247
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yo dis is weak
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Old 02-13-04, 08:07 PM   #4
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This wasnt that good.....you need to elevate.....read some other peoples pieces....up your vocab.....work on the flow a little....try adding some multies....and some internals to this to make it much better....but keep at it man.
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Old 02-14-04, 12:13 AM   #5
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Sorry i try not to give back input but this was whack from beginning to end credz read sum other peices and try to elevate
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Old 02-14-04, 01:26 AM   #6
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I was feelin this shyt most def... it had flow.. and shyt.. ya knoe?
4.1/5 mic.. keep droppin nigga..
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