the game need a spankin so im holden my belt-i know one day ill be a hova shit i molded myself-grow it by shelves-i aint got no memory cells-so i write everything down so my memory sells-get it-i try hard just to keep my cool-checkmate is around the corner so i keep my move-by the waist keep my tool-spray like arousal-im bone crusher part#2 aint scared of yall. halla at me

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Im tight with the steal dude, but you can look in my eyes and see for yourself I don't need one to kill you.

wahats crackin everybody this LongBeach Finest, new to the hood so i just thought a little somethin to kinda introduce myself

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Im tight with the steal dude, but you can look in my eyes and see for yourself I don't need one to kill you.

just an introduction

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Im tight with the steal dude, but you can look in my eyes and see for yourself I don't need one to kill you.

This needs some work.....dont structure it like that....put it line on top of line so its structured good and so it helps support the flow in your piece....You had some alright multies in this though....vocab was alright...keep at it.