tic toc ya dont stop...chea to the toc tic u dont quit....lets go


i'll leave niggas sadden in dismay, for an extended while..but it'll be worth ya while, cuz in time my lyrical anatomy has become hostile// ayo ill make u loose your sanity, leave u wit no sense of vainity, i shouldnt waste a verse when i can murder niggas manually...No mod can handle me, spit through my heart and mind so u can see my insanity// i'll survive the rain, and let rb feel my reign, comprehend my claim, plus fear the slightest mentioning of my name...make these fake rappers feel pain, wit every yard that i gain, in vain stab u in ya vein, and leave ya shirts wit nuttin but blood stains//

quick key what do u think

can i get sum feedback please??

6/10 that was aight

nice verse. tou need metas. overall its aight. keep droppin.

This was ok...But dont structure it in paragraph form though....I mean it makes it harder to read and it does throw the flow off in your piece and stuff....try making it line on top of line like...

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something like that and try to keep the lines around the same lenght, but keep at it.