i'm the madd hatter cause i'll take ya loot
pass it all up or i'll be forced to shoot

my raps are doper than the shit in the hood
you wanna shoot me but you only whish you could

if it was a gun fight you'll loose the battle
thats why your a day gang just you and your shadow

i role up to ya house like it was mine
and raise a stereo just to mess wit ya mind

im the guy takin names at the gates of hell
and walks up the guy that says ''dude your gettin a dell"
and because you did pot your gettin a cell
not a phone asshole a cell like the one in jail

and in comes Martha Stewert decoratin the hall
so i shoot her body off all over the wall

then the two of them start chattin
this is when..........shit happens

dis was ok for a newb...you need to use more complex vocab and try some multups....ur rhyme scheme was kinda week..but not bad for ur first go..keep it up

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yo dis was wacc da only hot line in there wuz " if it was a gun fight you'll lose da battle datz why your a day gang juss you and ya shadow"
need some webster(vocab) end part sounds like eminem(but he would of did better)
anywayz try to say some unheard of hot shit and keep rhymin .....one