yea. 20 lines max. ladies first...(that means you, stupid)

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very original
ill hav my verse soon nd u gots no chance but dont feed of my verse

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Any Last Words?


This fool cant contemplate so he fabricates that he creates! …
Ill desecrate your spit, you “verse” is more like a “debate” with a “soul mate” …
Pulling out prewrites like the tweezers to when he masturbates …
My punches would rip you through armor plates…
don’t wait for ill lines to come to you, rap + you don’t equate…
“JUSS BLAZE,” how clever, names himself after the worst emcee ever…
However, he’s not useless, he sucks dick forever charging nothing whatsoever…
Be clever, don’t bring your weak shit to your next endeavor…
You couldn’t visualize ill lines if I “maximized” them and tatted them on your eyes…
Its ironic that u battle when u already knew this was mine…
Why you call urself ‘emcee’ ur more like a bitch sniffing for asses to follow…
Don’t even know why you “spit” the homeboys tell me you good at the “swallow”…
But lets think realistically, in actuality you another casualty exposed to radiant ill lines and dead instantly…
This Poser poppin lyrics out of pistols all plastic no chrome, you coulnt think of a ill verse if I wrote one your dome…
When this fool runs out of lines to ‘bite’ he makes meals out of thick dicks…
Damn this shit was over before it begun, a little anticlimactic…

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You wanna start war? now watch your record bomb/
i'll have this battle done quick, like Desert Storm/ (shortest battle in history)
when i blast things you can't get the toast to stop/
i put red spots on your shirt like polka dots/
my rhymes heavy like Pun and they smash your face in/
yo whole squad is full of jerks, like masturbation/
lyrical lasceration that will slash a patient/
leave your face full of holes like the mask of Jason/
you wanna face shit?/ Blaze give you a face lift/
my rhymes whip ass like a fukin dominatrix/
im a lyrical don among hysterical misfits/
the spiritual bomb mixed with physical fitness/
you aint ready for me armed with a lyrical machette/
when it comes to beef you dont want it, you fukin veggie/
my dogs is grimya than yo mom's vagina/
the muzzle flash make you squint, like you born in China/
you rap style is fake, like Britney's boob job/
I smoke you fukin herbs, like Dre and Snoop Dogg/
lemme give you some feedback to hopefully guide you/
YOU FUCKIN SUCK!!!! like the asian on American Idol/

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I couldn't feel you war-monger, juss blaze you got it by a long shot

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breakdown for war monger:

flow:slick nice use of the multis through out the peice overall great flow 8/10

volcab:again the multis weren't basic no nice size and wide variety of words used great work 8/10

punches:good punches some played topics like my fav line,"Pulling out prewrites like the tweezers to when he masturbates …" but it still worked and they addressed him and bullied him around like it was on the school yard good job 7/10

overall:23/30 good battle

breakdown for just blaze:

flow:bars all over the place in size little or no multis and most of the bars didn't even rhyme 3/10

volcab:average nothing special 5/10

punches:it's odd that the best lines from both of you came from played out topics but hey, my fav line here was, "yo whole squad is full of jerks, like masturbation" weak but best you had the only line that really did any damage 5/10

overall:13/30 little rhyming and not much of punches

vote--war monger just clearly a better verse

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and sign up for the battle league would yeah, also show up if your already in the league

Close Battle But Im Goin With War Monger On This One.He Seemed To Show A Bit More Complexity And Strength

Vote-Monger

yo war mong u had a hot verse so dont be down on yurself.
just needed a lil betta structure
fav line
Why you call urself ‘emcee’ ur more like a bitch sniffing for asses to follow…
Don’t even know why you “spit” the homeboys tell me you good at the “swallow”…

just blaze althogh yo name lame like the kid said
yur flow is flames and these bars beat him alone
my rhymes heavy like Pun and they smash your face in/
yo whole squad is full of jerks, like masturbation/
lyrical lasceration that will slash a patient/
leave your face full of holes like the mask of Jason/
you wanna face shit?/ Blaze give you a face lift/
my rhymes whip ass like a fukin dominatrix/

gud shyt both of u!

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bomb first( I will BATTLE N E 1)

Help me close these/ and I will help U
an EYE 4 an EYE
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=122271

juss blaze took this one, his verse was very clear and flowed well and he had some good meta's

yo whole squad is full of jerks, like masturbation
you rap style is fake, like Britney's boob job/
I smoke you fukin herbs, like Dre and Snoop Dogg

i was feelin these lines

war monger i wasent feelin ya structure but aprt from tht it was ok

honest votes on this please
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=117127

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