Aight nig, 7 barz max and all tha great things along side a battle

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LGB FreeYayo

A.K.A. Lil Nae2

ChYld
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Lyrical Crook

aight yo here goes:

DisasterMaster, more like lyrical-disaster/
ya bastard, watch an' see as you get plastered//
You a straight bitchnigga, I'm gettin bigga feedin off that/
I'm like a James Bond figure to you wit a Lousville Slugger Bat//
I just drop a weak line an' you already tweak out/
I leak ya out, seek ya out and murder everything ya about//
Dawg do something bout tha breath, smellin like beans/
Coulda used that in WWII to put niggas to death, get some Listerine//
AS it seem I'm almost up, but still goina toast ya up/
As a muthafuckin roast an' I boast bout compressin' ya in a cup//
U read everything from a transcript, if that, like ya a slave/
Listen to ya Master, it ya don't behave ya goin end up in tha grave//
Last bar but I'm tha star in tha car on twankies, skankie pankie passion/
Cast Mars is where u from so I pull tha lyrical trigger like a assassin//

7 barz, now its ya turn
drop

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LGB FreeYayo

A.K.A. Lil Nae2

ChYld
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Lyrical Crook

i think nephew j was better than disaster master that is true that bitch dont make sense

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - strobe

Last bar revised:

Last bar but I'm tha star in tha cat on twankies, skankie pankie passion/
Past Mars is where you from so I pull tha lyrical trigger like an assassin//

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Murdered:

LGB FreeYayo

A.K.A. Lil Nae2

ChYld
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Lyrical Crook

ok nephew j, right now u messin with a bird of prey
u think a meta4 is a cliche, what when i spit and spray
when venom hit and u start to decay, but ur arsenal is dissrayed
ur rhymes ar confusing, and ar somewhat amusing, they keep on loseing
1-7 dam the record speeks for itself, sell ur body and soul 2 bucks is ur wealth
Shertown is sounding unconclusive, like like how protrusive was with ur mothers cliterus
this venomus spit, i rock the beat like sid vicous, jumping on u like i was hittin switches
when im dont u'll be left with a seven year itch,
rhymes are played and ur computers have glitches, and spits that kill and leave u in stiches.

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maan..what a battle...hmm..i think the DM gets my vote...you need to work on ur vocab overall ur a pretty good emcee just need some work along with you DM

I think that was a pretty gd battle if i could vote ild vote DM but i only jus joined cant vote yet. vote=DM. Peace

i dont see why poeple say the same shit about me. its like like im listening to a broken record player. if i hear plaster, master, and bastard in the say rap again im gona shot myself.

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hey since i voted for yall dont forget to vote at my battle against #1~soldier~#1
look it was nothin personal i just thought tht DM had the better punches...

upin in this bitch for some votes

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yo man.............both cam hard But DisasterMaster won heres y...........

Dm: coo punches bro i can see u r improving in your skills..............you had pretty coo vocab.....was realy feelin ur last two lines tho...but over all it was alright...

Nephew: you were doing fine bro you had soem alright vocab...........n i guess u had some coo punches but you need to work on them some more.....what i dint like about your flow is the bad breath lines..............c'mon man this is text battle....so all i gotta say is work on some metas n ur punches.........n if ur gonna do personals do em right...but keep at it bro........im not bein mean just bein real.............

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my vote=DisasterMaster

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my bad its suppose to be on the DisasterMaster summary..............I wasnt feelin r last two lines

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okay overall a good battle punches and vocab were about the same for yall but u can tell nephew j is a newbi...because he had to revise his rap..now thats one hit
structure, nj
flow dm
punches neither
opener dm
closer dm

v/dm

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Blue Print

B.P.

2 more votes people, and i will have another r.i.p.ed

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drop ya votes........uppin......................up up up...

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Murdered:

LGB FreeYayo

A.K.A. Lil Nae2

ChYld
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Lyrical Crook