Every line I spit is so fuckin glorious
I seen yo little lines, you must have got yo name cuz yo dick suckins notorious
or you just wanted to spit something to bore me with
I can make this real gorey, bitch
and turn you into a sorry snitch
Yeah you hale from brooklyn, but you got no business reppin biggies name
Cuz if bed-sty knew you there's no chance you'd be steppin in this game
It's not often you can find heaven in a name
but this godly shit I be injectin in ya brain
Is killin every devil in this game
All I gotta say is next time watch who you rhyme with
this muthafucka wants to be biggie but you ain't even shyne bitch!

theres a simple task in front of me, and im gunna get it done//
burn this hotdog to a crisp, like an albino in the sun//
cuz i dont play when is spit shit, i only speak the truth//
ill leave you dead and buried, bloated fatter than babe ruth//
how you gunna come around here, showin all that disrespect//
bitch im the diety above god, now who the fuck has been wrecked//
im tired of fuckin newbies, comin in actin VINTAGE like they got flows//
how many dope mcs from scotland, duhhh, nobody knows//
you just another copy, a replica for me to sit down//
take that stupid off your face, turn that smile upside down//
cuz im gunna kill you, slice, knife to yo neck//
the only shit you'll ever say on a mic is, "excuse me, can i get a mic check"
when i get done, be as "vintage" as some new shoes//
you'll be over with, like fabolous rappin without a "clue"//



there ya go

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hey im gona give it to mc cause he told yo ass he had a little flow too

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - strobe

alright people lets get some good votes in here, C MON

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ite Vin-tage1 u had alot of shit i was feelin,but u also had a alot of shit dat was real simple
punches-7/10
structure-8/10
vocab-7/10
flow-8/10
closing-7/10
overall-7/10

mcnotorious- was feelin yo shit also had alot of shit i can dig
punches-8/10
structure-8/10
vocab-8/10
flow-8/10
closing-8/10
overall-9/10
Vote^^^

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uppin for votes........................
hit this one up peoples cmon

BAR BY BAR BREAKDOWN!!!!!!

Every line I spit is so fuckin glorious
I seen yo little lines, you must have got yo name cuz yo dick suckins notorious
Nice punch but it was a stretched lline so that fucked it up...
or you just wanted to spit something to bore me with
I can make this real gorey, bitch
and turn you into a sorry snitch
Weak punch...but nice flow in that...
Yeah you hale from brooklyn, but you got no business reppin biggies name
Cuz if bed-sty knew you there's no chance you'd be steppin in this game
Not too hard of a punch but u attempted a personal so u get credit there...
It's not often you can find heaven in a name
but this godly shit I be injectin in ya brain
Is killin every devil in this game
Sorta of just talkin and it happens to rhyme...
All I gotta say is next time watch who you rhyme with
this muthafucka wants to be biggie but you ain't even shyne bitch!
Ok punch..an ok closer...

Okay...well it was just like you were telling him shit....u didnt throw too many punches...the ones you did throw werent that great...work on better personals and punches....dont stretch lines....and try to get multis in there....an ok verse

VERSE SCORE
48/100

theres a simple task in front of me, and im gunna get it done//
burn this hotdog to a crisp, like an albino in the sun//
Nice opener and a hot punch...liked it a lot...
cuz i dont play when is spit shit, i only speak the truth//
ill leave you dead and buried, bloated fatter than babe ruth//
Okay punch...noit as great as the opener..
how you gunna come around here, showin all that disrespect//
bitch im the diety above god, now who the fuck has been wrecked//
Ehh not that great...
im tired of fuckin newbies, comin in actin VINTAGE like they got flows//
how many dope mcs from scotland, duhhh, nobody knows//
Haha nice lil personal...ok punch..
you just another copy, a replica for me to sit down//
take that stupid off your face, turn that smile upside down//
Boring...
cuz im gunna kill you, slice, knife to yo neck//
the only shit you'll ever say on a mic is, "excuse me, can i get a mic check"
Streched line and a bad punch...
when i get done, be as "vintage" as some new shoes//
you'll be over with, like fabolous rappin without a "clue"//
Ok closer...

Alright...first off fix ya structure...makes u look like a pure newbie...dont use //'s...ur verse wus up and down the whole way....u came harder than him and actually threw punches....nice job...work on multis and personals....fix ya structure...good win....

VERSE SCORE
67/100

Vote - mcnotorious

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That Old School Mother Fucker

Aint That A Bitch?

Crhyme Sindicate

Alright Vin Peice Of Advice- And I Would Take It If I Were You ... - Look Over Your Flow... Your Recyclin Your Own Lyrics' .. And It Throws Your Verse Off Balance And Shit' Don't Do That' !!! ...

Mcnotorious' ... Alright.. Your Verse Was A Bit Basic.. But Checck The Lines:

cuz im gunna kill you, slice, knife to yo neck//
the only shit you'll ever say on a mic is, "excuse me, can i get a mic check"
when i get done, be as "vintage" as some new shoes//
you'll be over with, like fabolous rappin without a "clue"//

^^Them Were Probably Your Best Lines Right There!!' .. Just Evelate Kiid And You Will Improve You have To Start Some WHere!!!

Check Vin's Lines:

Every line I spit is so fuckin glorious
I seen yo little lines, you must have got yo name cuz yo dick suckins notorious
^Alright PunchLine Right There

Check It Again:

Yeah you hale from brooklyn, but you got no business reppin biggies name
Cuz if bed-sty knew you there's no chance you'd be steppin in this game

^Nice Punchline Right There Its Heated' ...!!! You Would Have Had This As An Easy Win If You Didn't Recycle All Of Your Played Out Lines' .. Kiid!!!

Vote: Mcnotorious

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thanks disasterpeice you wanna batlle just set that shit up

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lets finish off this battle,,,,,,,,,,,,,, lets get some votes in here

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uppin for votes

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lets finish the voting people i would like to win sometime today

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notorious took thyz battle, the otha katz flow waz terrible, structure sux... an someone should by thyz kid a thasores or sumin ta stop the konstint use of wordz, like damn that whole thyng waz juz annoyin
v/mcnotoriouse

hhhhmmmmmmm i wonder who won lol
Vin u need 2 work on vocab personals punches and multis
punches-5/10
structure-3/10
vocab-4/10
flow-6/10
closing-6/10
overall-4/10

mcnotorious- good flow u could workon vocab
punches-8/10
structure-8/10
vocab-5/10
flow-8/10
closing-8/10
overall-7/10
u obviously won

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