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Old 04-10-04, 07:18 PM   #1
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A Flow With A Beat

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alright guys..umm...this is actually a really short song with no chorus..here's the beat to the song so you could read the flow with the beat.

Click Here For The Beat

when you go to the site just click on download then it will load in like 10 seconds so you could hear the song...k...

oh yea..if you don't listen to the beat while reading it won't sound good alright..and read the flow fast to go wit the beat..



I hate it when i hear people say it that i'll never make it in the world of rap entertainment/
And now I hear people complain'n about me portayin an asian that has taken a place that before was vacant/
I'm an Mc always rappin endlesly/ and soon will eventually/ take a place that is ment for me/
And you've always said to me/wut my future is and you see/i'm made for this not only physicly but mentaly/
Me always usin no sensativity/
Always feel like somebody tryin to stick a knife in ta me/
Tryin ta give me misery/
but literealy/
my life is like tryin ta join the marines/
Gettin stronger in the in of me/
I know that I've done wrong/
I thank you Lord my life is gonna be fun and long/
I'm staninding up tall strong/
Sayin I'm Tired of these girls, cars, thugs and thongs/
In this song/
I'm here I'm a christian and I'm proud to say that/
I know when I was bad there were people I made mad/
And now that I think Of wut I use to do before, I say I hate that/
And I ain't glad, but i ain't sad, and like i already sed, I changed man/
I use to hurt people, just for fun/
Thinkin how cool it would be to hold a gun/
Now thinkin a fool would be age 16 with a son/
That was my dad, damn that was to young/
It use to feel like my life a world of destruction/
Nobody left to care for me..cuz there was just nothin/
Always Feelin that I'm missin somethin/
But now knowin that somethin was comin/
Now I could stop and rest, and just stop runnin/


oh yea..guys..I might use this to get me a record deal..maybe..

It's still not finished


-----chris-----

Last edited by NoLost4Rhymes : 04-11-04 at 01:43 PM. Reason: Cuz it didn't make sence...the song didn't make sense
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Old 04-10-04, 09:03 PM   #2
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Yo this shit is on point son..

I'm an Mc always rappin endlesly/ and soon will eventually/ take a place that is ment for me/
And you've always said to me/wut my future is and you see/i'm physicly and mentaly mad for this rap shit and still usin no sensativity/
Always feel like somebody tryin to stick a knife in ta me/
Tryin ta give me misery/
but literealy/

dope ryhme sceme^^

beat is nice too.
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Old 04-10-04, 10:07 PM   #3
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you serious dawg..for realz..well anyways I'm usin this to get my self a deal for 888entertainment records

the site is 888entertainment.com

well thanx man...
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Old 04-10-04, 10:37 PM   #4
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yo man where did u get the beats...id love 2 start recordin with beats myself...by the way the shit was hott....very hott...keep it up and im glad ur not scared 2 admit who u r...like that 1 song "i am not ashame of the gospel, i am not ashamed of the 1 i love" very nice...who doesnt sign u for that song is crazy...keep it up...i could use a christian 2 talk so if anytime u wanna collab or do somethin just PM me...thanks man...inspiration song...
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Old 04-10-04, 11:49 PM   #5
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yo man where did u get the beats...id love 2 start recordin with beats myself...by the way the shit was hott....very hott...keep it up and im glad ur not scared 2 admit who u r...like that 1 song "i am not ashame of the gospel, i am not ashamed of the 1 i love" very nice...who doesnt sign u for that song is crazy...keep it up...i could use a christian 2 talk so if anytime u wanna collab or do somethin just PM me...thanks man...inspiration song...


are you serious about whut you sed man..well thanx..that gives me alot more confidence..serious..but anyways..thanx for the feedback...and If you wanna talk about God or Jesus just pm me or somethin..cuz..wut are Christians here for..alright..I also sent you a PM (Personal Message) just holluh bac...peace..
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Old 04-11-04, 01:55 AM   #6
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oh yea..lets do somethin together next time
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Old 04-11-04, 01:45 PM   #7
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Guys..ta let ya know...I changed the words...cuz before the song didn't make sence..and now it does...not the whole song is on topic..
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Old 04-11-04, 03:25 PM   #8
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Alright..this is good..good luck wit the deal..and keep writtin
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Old 04-11-04, 04:53 PM   #9
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nice.. i especially like the beats, matches the song pretty well, though i would have to hear you flow over it..
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Old 04-11-04, 07:15 PM   #10
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Yea, Nice Shit. I See You Had To Get Some Shit Off Your Chest. Good Shit, Come Wit It Again For Me.
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Old 04-11-04, 09:21 PM   #11
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thanx for the feedback man....don't worry you'll hear me when I get famous someday..lolz..(mayeb it could happen You never know) well all this feedback is gonna give me alot of confidence..peace..
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Old 04-13-04, 06:08 PM   #12
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damn dude..the beat is tite..especially u..keep writtin
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