i spit first

Shiittttttttttttttttt' ... QuiCckPunch' Gun Merk You Little Wun!' lol

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yeah here it go......

look at dis quickpunch kid beggin for fame//
he tryin to get his hustle on,he tryin to expose his name//
but he cant cuz all his punches always comin out lame//
sit back relax and watch me murda dis cat in his own game//
cuz im a nonstop superial, individual, physical, type of criminal,//
mentally like the chemical//
kid you need a miracle to reach my level//
ima keep the lyrical flow it aint gon never be settled//
quickpunch call the cops when you see me dawg//
cuz dis shit wont stop til you see me fall//
Q.P. killa and im raised like a pimp//
come and see me in the swamp bout that gangsta shit you punk bitch//

yall vote dis battle and ill return yall tha favor peace!!!

no crew,d/r,or hate votes please.yall vote on dis one peace

c'mon quickpunch you dun passed 15-20 mins hurry up dawg.

Aight check it.. quick had this for sure.. so I'm gonna analyze your verse so you can elevate:

look at dis quickpunch kid beggin for fame//
he tryin to get his hustle on,he tryin to expose his name//
ok this is kinda played, and the rhyme is very simple, just replacing one letter.
but he cant cuz all his punches always comin out lame//
sit back relax and watch me murda dis cat in his own game//
same deal withe the rhyme, and the punches are weak, not original at all
cuz im a nonstop superial, individual, physical, type of criminal,//
mentally like the chemical//
mentally like chemical makes no sense. and this is a battle, stick to dissing him.
kid you need a miracle to reach my level//
ima keep the lyrical flow it aint gon never be settled//
see you could have flipped the first line to make a punch, maybe use a nice setup line... but as it is there is no metah or anything, its just weak.
quickpunch call the cops when you see me dawg//
cuz dis shit wont stop til you see me fall//
why would you fall?
Q.P. killa and im raised like a pimp//
come and see me in the swamp bout that gangsta shit you punk bitch//
flow is poor, and this isn't even a punch.

aight basically, work on using the concepts and flip them to make a nice, original, hard hitting punch. and put personals in there. and up your rhymes. dawg and fall dont rhyme, pimp and bitch don't rhyme.

peace.

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RIP SMOKAJOKA WE WILL MiSS YOU!!!!!!

ight spit 1st....have ur shit done in 15-20 mins....lol pce..i'll follow up when uve spat im not goin anywhere

IGHT THATS THAT NEWB SHIT...YO YALL CHECK THIS OUT


This is a lyrical outbreak, what the fuck is he thinking?
battling a killer on this site you got to stop fucking drinking
Pussy go to tutorial learn to spit and then come battle me
otherwise ur chances of winning are as slim as winning the lottery
i'm spitting money man this shit is crazy
you spitting change nigger so you bankrupt like JD
dick head I'm putting your ass six feet deep
Rhymes so garbage I can beat you in my sleep
ur prediction for winning are as false as Ms. Cleo’s tarot card
let me re-name U ERECTION so at least for one minute u’ll feel hard
Rhymes of that the end are an insult to yourself man, so harsh that you should be banned
swampsouljah707 an arrogant dick so the only way he could get up is if I gave him a hand
your careers in the hole like Boy George during gay sex
You must rap in sandles cause every time you flip you flop
He wanted his rhymes to be shit so he ate them and took laxative
Beat ur face wit a magnet to make you look more attractive
U suck so bad I doubt Xzibit could pimp ur quotes
I tried to suck as bad as u, and I still ran away with the votes
Seriously, just kill yourself, chances of a good life are slim
But if swampsouljah707 gave himself to suicide, suicide wouldn't take him

No Need To Explain... The Vote..!!!!!!!!!!!







Vote: QuiCck PuNch

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thats a hatin ass vote dawg but its coo.and fuck you disasterpuss hatin ass bitch!!

^^^yeh no need to explain he had much beta punches n the other guy was wack!

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ay yo yall explain ur votes be fair...dont need hate votes......SO EXPLAIN....IGHT PPL UPPIN THIS.....

breakdown for my vote:

flow-tie
complex-quik
punches-quik
multis-quik
wordplay-quik
personals-quik
overall-quik

experience jus showed through here!

Seriously, just kill yourself, chances of a good life are slim
But if swampsouljah707 gave himself to suicide, suicide wouldn't take him

^^^fav line, original neva heard out like it....pz

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SHIT Waste Of Mah-Mutha-Fuckin-Time LMAO!' .. But The BreakDown!!


look at dis quickpunch kid beggin for fame//
he tryin to get his hustle on,he tryin to expose his name//
^Weak Opener 1/10
But Guess What' It Rhymes AtLeast Lmfao!!

but he cant cuz all his punches always comin out lame//
sit back relax and watch me murda dis cat in his own game//
^Aight Punch 4/10

cuz im a nonstop superial, individual, physical, type of criminal,//
mentally like the chemical//
^Fell Short On This Line

kid you need a miracle to reach my level//
ima keep the lyrical flow it aint gon never be settled//
^Whats This???

quickpunch call the cops when you see me dawg//
cuz dis shit wont stop til you see me fall//
^Ok.............. ??? No Meaning To That Shit

Q.P. killa and im raised like a pimp//
come and see me in the swamp bout that gangsta shit you punk bitch//
^I Guess This Shit' ... Was Weak lol


Anyways .... !!!!!!! QuiCckPunch Came Harder In Every Category!!!

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