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Rainy Daze
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Raindrops....soft as cotton, falling by the millions
Every individual drop represents my feelings For every tear I shed, is another season passed Quickly and silently I see my happiness pass And float out of my grasp like thos cumulus clouds And pain flashes over me like lightning as my heart roars with thunderous sounds Woe is me...give me a parasol From this pain that pours like rain, for we share a soul We desire to touchdown and merge with our puddles For you, its made of rain...mine is of love and cuddles But in both I see my reflection But one is temporary offering little protection The other one is murky but is clear with affection Yet God knows how to open the skies with absolute perfection My heart is infatuated with being saturated With Love to the point where I almost feel intoxicated But for all the times of rain....there are times when the sun spreads its rays But God knows I love those rainy days |
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Black Thief still...
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Upping
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i was really liking this. its a very good topic to. i never seen anybody poet about rain and their life and make it into one. really liking this,
Raindrops....soft as cotton, falling by the millions Every individual drop represents my feelings I thought that was a real good way to start it off. But for all the times of rain....there are times when the sun spreads its rays But God knows I love those rainy days thats real nice, i only like this because you made it sound so clear, n i was really into this poem. one thing tho, instead of putting it all like how you did, lets say the structure, try breaking it down into seperate stanzas', like your first 6 lines will be ur first stanza so on and so on,, pce |
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ive seen it but in a different way so i was feeling this stay up 1
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uppin for feedback please
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i like da poem showed a lot of emotion keep doin yo thin
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Dont Push Me Of Regret It
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erm..a bit basic..but its ok..
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