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05-02-04, 07:22 PM
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GrOwN aSs MaN
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Psychiatric Evaluation
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**I enter Dr. Taylor's office, nervously taking my seat in his leather-brown arm-chair.**
Dr. Taylor: "Well, I didn't expect to see you until next week. ..................So tell me what troubles you, why did you want to speak?" **I start talking, almost in a stream of consciousness.** Exactly what key is death in, the moment my breath..- Ends its cadence, and regret is the only thing left..- Leaving a deafening, silence for contemplation..- I've spent a lifetime struggling, but where's my compensation..- Save for, a face scarred by personal blemishes..- Penitence saved for, the grateful souls of the privileged..- A lost resemblance, the un-dead has no reflection..- With the pollution I cast, I can pass no inspection..- I feel like an extra, cast in my own cinema..- Watching a stranger playing the role I invented..- It's perfectly fitted, so why am I necessary..- Why, am I stressed over this when the rest is very..- Readily apparent, I wake up steady and coherent..- Wondering if my people's were ready to be my parents..- I mean, at age 7 my world was gutted and corrupted..- Pure water was lead laden, that rat shouldn't have touched it..- So my voice grew smaller, because no one could be trusted..- Promiscuity grew through me, it's where all my love went..- Mothafuck the world man, I'm sick of living this life..- I've pushed everyone away so I can sit here and die..- The edge of existence, crumbling away like stale bread..- Falling away by the piece, then stepped on by the unaware..- My blunders are blatant, they're the cause but who can say..- With my back to my past, it recurs like boomerang..- Dr. Taylor: "Well, N-Sight...talk about boomerangs." Dayum...no help. |
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05-02-04, 08:35 PM
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The Truth
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IP:
Damn thats good and deep.Nice all together.
8/10
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05-02-04, 08:40 PM
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The Epitome Of Greatness
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IP:
i felt this piece fam..raw emotion and depth good vocab and wordplay everything flowed great...9/10
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05-02-04, 09:53 PM
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IP:
well done
deep piece, it seemed very introspective it flowed nicely and had good imagery vocab was definitely your strong point on this |
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05-03-04, 12:38 AM
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IP:
that is thoughtful and deep.i like it a lot. 9/10
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05-03-04, 07:32 AM
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IP:
thanx yo
def. preciate the feedback holla atcha boyee 1 |
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05-04-04, 07:07 AM
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GrOwN aSs MaN
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IP:
sendin dis back to the top
holl 1 |
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05-04-04, 07:30 AM
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darkmanner
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Man dis shit is Deeeeeeeeeeeeeeep. Perfect 10 for real.
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05-04-04, 12:09 PM
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GrOwN aSs MaN
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IP:
'preciate the feedback
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05-05-04, 10:11 AM
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GrOwN aSs MaN
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IP:
uppin dis piece for more feedback
holla atcha boyee 1 |
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05-06-04, 11:20 AM
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GrOwN aSs MaN
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IP:
uppin whodi
holla atcha boyee 1 |
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05-06-04, 11:24 AM
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Skadoosh!
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IP:
damn sight
never knew u cud be that deep 9/10 on that piece u gud dawg!!
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