I cant believe how many niggas come on here wit lyrics that r abstruse
some niggas write like they got a dictionary in use
but i dont need all that shit my rhymes r fatter than bruce bruce
every rhyme i spit i leave u bemused
ill belittle any nigga thats in my path
im boorish to any nigga that wanna feel my wrath
and ruthless to any nigga that wanna feel the gat
shit in ya pants ill leave u elegiac
yall niggas best duck when i cock back
ill extricate ya life and not give a fuck
heres a herald......nigga never buck
cause if u run up chances r u will get done up

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beezy crew fo life
1 love live life
2 the fullest

HOLLA @YA GIRL

beezy crew from life to death
n when I die put the colors across my chest

haha nice...so wht r u a chick or guy? cause if ur a chick u sure got the attitude of that i dont give a fuck im here 2 take u out...shit was mad coo..keep it up

pretty good work on ur structure though

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im a female homies and thanx for the props

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beezy crew fo life
1 love live life
2 the fullest

HOLLA @YA GIRL

beezy crew from life to death
n when I die put the colors across my chest

i need some more feedback

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beezy crew fo life
1 love live life
2 the fullest

HOLLA @YA GIRL

beezy crew from life to death
n when I die put the colors across my chest

sum good lines...almost like punches


work on structure and rhyme scheme...make it more complex


decent for a short piece


good vocab

1

holla @ ya girl wit some feedback n i promise ill return the favor

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beezy crew fo life
1 love live life
2 the fullest

HOLLA @YA GIRL

beezy crew from life to death
n when I die put the colors across my chest

"I cant believe how many niggas come on here wit lyrics that r abstruse
some niggas write like they got a dictionary in use"...nice punch..but "abstruse" seems
a little "abstruse" itself. Just playin. I thought it was decent for being short though. work on the flow a little more..if you can nod your head while your writin, than you know that you got somethin.

nice lil piece....your structure needs work but everything else was pretty good.......6.5/10

can i get some feedback

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beezy crew fo life
1 love live life
2 the fullest

HOLLA @YA GIRL

beezy crew from life to death
n when I die put the colors across my chest

yea, but can i get some votes on Mad Dog Vs BigNeks,

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Ayo, This is the mighty nutcracker no doubt. Its ok for people on this level to make mistakes. It is ok that we cry and make mistakes. That is part of being a human being. You have to sacrifice for the best and the best is yet to come. So to anyone that doubted me..... im jus sayin, Fuck You. (GroupHome Song Intro)

uppin 4 some mo feedback

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beezy crew fo life
1 love live life
2 the fullest

HOLLA @YA GIRL

beezy crew from life to death
n when I die put the colors across my chest

uuuuuuuuuuuuppppppppppppin

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beezy crew fo life
1 love live life
2 the fullest

HOLLA @YA GIRL

beezy crew from life to death
n when I die put the colors across my chest

ayo... sum iight shyt fo real. keep doin it namean? sum coo lines but ya flo sumtimes jus aint hit... like tha boal said jus nod ya head

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yo beezy this is the first spit of urs ive ever seen and i was def feelin it keep it comin girl........................

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