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Old 05-14-04, 12:46 PM   #1
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Ever held a crystal to a natural light?
Beauty nearly unable to describe...
The same feeling brought forth from inside
...that exact instant I met her eyes


Starts as always, a flirty glance here or there
Scared that it would be construed as cold stares
Then there comes a time, approached and spoke
Hope for the best, with a lump in my throat
Leads to notes passed, of how I miss you
Constantly, and how I long to again kiss you
And through it all, something makes it so hard
To accept three people hold a place in you heart
Apart from what logic says, I stay and wait for the best
Yet hate all this weight placed on my chest
If I left would it matter, would you care if I go?
I dont know... but I hope thats not so
Although, regardless, I'll stay and jump at the chance
To someday, be the focus of your plans
Because when I hold your hands, and lay embraced
Kissing you, I know how sweet ambrosia must taste
And I hate that I may be set up for my greatest fear
To give my heart to someone and have all that disappear
But here... have my heart and all thats good left inside
And hopefully all these tears that I've cried...
...will lead to this picture of perfection at my side

I know you're confused...
..You know at times I feel used
Pessimistic thoughts kill me...
...So at some time I hope you see
That whoever you choose...
...I do and always will, be in love with you
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Old 05-14-04, 01:19 PM   #2
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Old 05-14-04, 01:37 PM   #3
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Old 05-14-04, 08:30 PM   #4
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Anything that has a resemblence to intelligence is slept upon here
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Old 05-14-04, 08:37 PM   #5
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Wow man...that was a very good drop....that last part was amazing.....very emotional....great wordplay on it....nice drop.....props.....

there ya go.....
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Old 05-14-04, 08:38 PM   #6
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Thank you...

I'm glad atleast someone reads here
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Old 05-14-04, 08:50 PM   #7
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Umm. This was on point, Well done. Creative, Emotions was deep in this piece. Overall had to say Well done.

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Old 05-14-04, 10:07 PM   #8
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tight man, tight. keep spittin that intelligenyt shit, some peeps appreciate. go check some of my shit if u want.
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Old 05-15-04, 09:17 PM   #11
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Old 05-15-04, 09:35 PM   #12
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Hi Chrit.
Was alright
i aint a big
fan of the love letter type thing
but u showed good emotions thru
this and your flow was constant
throughout, maybe ur imagery
could have shown more and
it was too direct for my taste.
dropsmore.
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Old 06-02-04, 01:09 PM   #13
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it was ok but it def needed some major work keep elevatin.......................................... .....
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