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Old 05-15-04, 12:07 PM   #1
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Aight, Here Go A Lil Verse. Peep It, And Give Some Feedback...


Listen,
I Remember Back In the Day When I Was Sharp-And-Nice Before The Scars-And-Fights...
And On The Darkest-Nights I Was In My Glory Strapped Under Them Apartment-Lights...
I Been On Trains, Cars-And-Bikes And Seen The Inside Of Dumpsters, Drawers-And-Pipes...
Of Course I've Tasted-Flesh And Sent Plenty To The Gates-Of-Death Without Any Wasted-Breath...
Man, I Spent Months Stuck In Basements-Wet When I'm The Mu'fucka Who Creates-Respect...
It's Me Who's Bold-And-Ruthless, But These Days Everyone Sleepin And Tryin To Own-The-New-Shit...
What Am I Now? Old-And-Useless, Fuck All Yall Doubters Leave Me Alone-And-Use-Fists...
I Was Told-I-Aint-Choose-This So I Roam-Wit-To-Clips, And If Ya Think I'll Fold-I-Got-News-Bitch...
The Kid Still Accurate And Able-To-Aim, Wit Me A Cat Could Take Over And Strangle-The-Game...
I Aint Never Scared I'll Mangle-A-Gang And Bang-Up-Them-Thangz, In Fact I'm Labeled-Insane...
But Still I'm Real-And-True, Tell Me Though, How Would You Feel If Some Two Bit Hustler Was Dealin-You...
And People Only Use Ya For A Meal-Or-Two, And Then Ya Get Thrown In A Sewer, What The Fuck! I Got Feelins-Too...


Leave Ya Thoughts...
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Old 05-15-04, 12:09 PM   #2
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It's Me Who's Bold-And-Ruthless, But These Days Everyone Sleepin And Tryin To Own-The-New-Shit...
What Am I Now? Old-And-Useless, Fuck All Yall Doubters Leave Me Alone-And-Use-Fists...

fire!
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Old 05-15-04, 12:12 PM   #3
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ncie oen ur good my friend good flo good words using dis to reflect a truth
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Old 05-15-04, 12:35 PM   #4
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that was some hot stuff man keep doin your thang!
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Old 05-15-04, 12:39 PM   #5
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On the real, it's aight. I just wanna know what beat this shit is on...
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Old 05-15-04, 06:43 PM   #6
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Thanx For The Feedback Yall, I Appreciate It...

@EVER I Aint Spit It To A Beat Yet, It's Just Some Shit I Wrote...

Keep The Feedback Comin...
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Old 05-15-04, 07:02 PM   #7
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nyce flow...nyce wordplay...nyce concept very ill....multis....everything was on point stay up

got return the favor 1 pa
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Old 05-16-04, 08:20 AM   #8
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Yeah, hot shit dawg. Feelin it all dat way.
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Old 05-16-04, 02:59 PM   #9
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Good Lookin...

Uppin...
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Old 05-16-04, 03:51 PM   #10
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sik shit dawg sik shit
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Old 05-16-04, 04:33 PM   #11
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hot shyt dawg...fiya all around
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Old 05-17-04, 11:32 PM   #12
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Good Lookin Out On The Feedback Yall...

Keep It Comin...
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Old 05-18-04, 12:37 AM   #13
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was alright but stop using -'s and bold
it will help, and is better then ur current
structure, nice lines tho. keep itup
just stop using those gay ass -s and bolding it.
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Old 05-18-04, 08:15 AM   #14
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^^Fuckk all dat shit Action... It's good to have dat shit for da simple minded muthafuckkaz won't notice da punches, multis, and w/p shit unless u make it obvious for em... There are lil 12, 13, 14 yr old kids voting on battles and readin these verses ya know.
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Old 05-18-04, 11:28 AM   #15
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^^Word, That's The Only Reason I Do It... Cuz If You Don't Somehow Put Emphasis On Certain Words Mufuckas Aint Gon Get It.
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