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t-strom's fronting bitch, puttin you down and stop you in tracks/
run you over with lyrical talent you can't hold back/
like a tidal wave after you, i could crush you in one second/
this guys a midgit, stupid ass nigga from an estate in england/
i'll wrappe you in a plastic bag full of poisoness gasses gagging/
with arms around your neck sufficatin, slice open your neck/
put 5 shots of lethal execution injection to ya/
till you drible out of your mouth like a mental man in a fit/
come to my home town london, getting jumped worse than/
wateva shitty area you live in, be force feeded weed, through/
your throat burnin your adams apple/

ima take out this fly-weight..compared to him im mohammed ali/
this guy floats like a butterfly..but i sting like a killah-bee/
ima punch this guy in his guts..so he can spit his lunch up/
thats tha only way he be "sick"..he cudnt "cum"hard watchin a porno-flick/
u see this guy"cum" like he pussy..his spits trickle-down,whilst im cumin-up g/
bitch uz like H.I,without the V..so how u gonna be-iller/
fucked so many cats...i got aids.. they call me serial-killer/
see i`ve got more faces than casta-troy...uve fucked wit tha wrong-one/
so ima show these cats uz jus-a-boy...that t-stung..wit his stun-gun/
ma structure 2 strong...urs falling apart... wit all that weak filler/
go home..tell ya friends u jus lost...jus like tha thrilla-in-manilla.

Aight cool battle both of ya...ok time 2 analise...T-Storm good verse maintained a good structure and had good punches keep it up.

Fine Mind: Damn thats much better dawg the structure has really improved from your last battle props to ya However ur verses didnt rhyme line 4 line but u came real hardcore perhaps next time try including some punches as well.

V/T-Storm...keep elevating Fine Mind ur gettin better keep it up

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t-strom's fronting bitch, puttin you down and stop you in tracks/
run you over with lyrical talent you can't hold back/
like a tidal wave after you, i could crush you in one second/
this guys a midgit, stupid ass nigga from an estate in england/


^^^ HOW IN THE HELL DOES ENGLAND RHYME WITH SECONDS...SHIT LIKE THAT IS THE REASON YOU LOSE BATTLES FINE MIND...YOUR FLOW IS GOOD...YOUR STRUTCTURE IS GOOD...BUT YOU RHYME SECOND WITH ENGLAND...STOP IT!



ima take out this fly-weight..compared to him im mohammed ali/
this guy floats like a butterfly..but i sting like a killah-bee/
ima punch this guy in his guts..so he can spit his lunch up/
thats tha only way he be "sick"..he cudnt "cum"hard watchin a porno-flick/

^^^ same to you...how does FLICK rhyme with UP? WTF..just stop!


Ne way

My vote is going to T Storm...only because he had way more attempts at clever wordplay/metas/punches.


But, FINE MIND:

I've always said that you could be one of the best on this site. I believe that. Your structure and disses are good. Just elevate on the rest and you'll be a force to reckon with.


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yo t-storm had this battle, it flowed better and had better punches, the battle was aight but t-storm flowed better...

v/ t-storm

yo repay the favour links r in the sig.....l.......

ok both need 2 work on vocab flow personal and mutli
ok t storm ur structure was better flow was better and u had better punches u need 2 work on ur vocab and personals and multis

fm ur first 2 lines were good and thats about it u need 2 work on ur vocab personals flow structure punches elevate u have some poential

so my bote goes 2 t storm with an overall better verse

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dat was a good battle guys but im a have to say dat t-storm lead in the follwing

flow
rhymes
structure
punches

so ma vote goes to him na mean it obvious

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