ayo chek it u called da battle lets goooo

RUles:
10 to 20 lines
no d.r beef or crew votes
no bitin recyclin
u spit first...wun...

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chekin in lets go bitch drop ya shit now...wun

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man how can i compare to a fat little italian kid with his black side kick
yo bitch from queens how bout u suck my dick
wat a fag (yo nigga that was the shit)
fuck u nigga go eat u mamas clit
yo ima thug from ny cant mess wit me
all u do is steal and use ur dick to pee
it aint like u work u just steal for fun
hey look iva got the biggest gun
u lil bitch spear chuckers looked of italians and copied em
so no wonder ur his bitch go walk wit all ur fake gems
so how bout u get the fuck out
and dont only vote for ur friends
and dont begin to pout
just cuz u got a lemon while im sittin in da benz

jokah do ur thing and make us laugh this one will be good

diz man talk shit but he can speak it in his rhymez//
oh shit diz bitch got guns ..fuck it u wastiin my tyme//
if i eva met chu in real life ..id bitch slap u//
sit down and watch well ya own snitch clap u//
i pack diz fake chump like i pack ma lunchez//
ya doin all ya shit wrong cuz u smack ya punches//
u dont hit hard so wen u hitin iam laughin//
and u aint seen jokah so wen u bitchin iam clappin//
u gon start some beef like pac n biggie//
pull out da glock and make u dance da jiggie//
diz michael J cuz he "BEAT IT" in da school stall//
u nasty nigga ..pull out da glock//
make u shake dat thang like sean paull//
fuck u bitch..come at me wit dat shit//
its like i was pac or suge and u a crip//
pullin out da glock wen i see u and drop a clip//
id scream fuck da police but u prob got ya shit tapped//
fuck u nigga .. u just got clapped//
ya girl dont do it good that y u got ya cock snapped//
beat dis bitch wit a phone book//
dis nigga like a kid wit a stone..he shook//
like nas nigga ...i made u look//
steallin ma rhymes u should be takin 5 years fo bein a crook//
and iam da jokah but you is da joke//
and listen to ya masta cuz i jus spoke//

wun muh fuckah nuff said vote up on diz....

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ok breakdown

murda- u did good for a newb but u shoudlnt have started wit jokah cause hes way above ur level right now. u need to hit harder and work on rhyming jus keep practice

jokah-ur stuff was good and u hit hard had 2 minor hits then hit hard again it kept me readin good style plus ur rhyme scheme was good

my vote-jokah

had ta go easy on dis bitch haha.. wun uppin fo votez

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aight mayne thanx...uppin fo votez...

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aint bad for a second timer
im tryin to work on it
and im just goin up gainst the good ones so i can learn faster

murda I wrote: this was your first battle & that was aight...in my
opinion not that real punches the structure was aight.... vocab
not that many big words in the verse.....flow was average.....

Da Jokah: u had cool punches my personal favourite is:

"u gon start beef like pac n biggie
pull out da glock and make u dance da jiggie"

flow was real good.....vocab not many big words......structure
was real good so overall you was real good

my vote goes to: Da Jokah

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oh ya shit forgot to leave the link to my battle it's my first so it
that good but I need votes so here's the link

http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=124623

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yo flamez do me a favor hit up my battle wit murda
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=125379

^^Exactly.

VOTE: DA JOKAH

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yo im uppin for votes please vote for this battle i kno i lost so jus vote so it will close thanks

Aight... Jokah has this one... nuff said... heres the break down

JOKAH - Nice punches, nice flow, nice structure, nice style... overall you had a good spit against this new kid on the block

Murda - All i gatta say is elevate, no more self glory, no more forced rhymes, just elevate, remember punches are key...

Vote - JOKAH