Check it I just freestyled this out on the original board, thought I'd share with with y'all tho so I could get some feedback.

Freestyle keystyle... off the dome... no stopping, editing, revising, etc...

Unh.. Arsalan... unh..

As-salaam, its Arsalan, rappin on-and-on, till the break-of-dawn,
Let the fakes-come-on, I'm gonna take-them-on, I'm gonna break-them-maan,

Check it...

When I'm freestylin, when I'm free-flowin, you know I be stylin, what everybody showin,
Everybody knowin, what time it is... When Arsalan's flowin, you know what kind it is,
A dope verse, not one I wrote first, the kind that'd earn me a limo with a chauffer,
These other whack rap cats is jokers, and their time, in the lime, light is over,
I'm doper, and sicker... they're slower, and I'm quicker,
Got more Answers than the Sixers (The Answer=Iverson), if yo girl's a good dancer I'ma stick her,
South Texas, out-flexes, any faggot driving a Lexus,
With rims, wearin cheap ass brims, we eat fake MC's for break-fast,
I guess-its, just the method they employ, that Texas boys are brought up,
Try to talk shit, or use useless ploys*, and you gonna end up shot up,
Take off that necklace, you phoney-yo, I'm from Texas, city of San Antonio,
Lonely, yo, cuz ain't many like me, who can free, off the dome, off the brain,
And still have their verses be off the chain,
I spill many curses and drive others insane,
When I kill heads dead, it brings their mothers pain,

Unh.. damn I got interrupted by ppl IMing me... aight its cool.... lemme finish it

This rhyme I'm finishin, your time's diminishin,
Your title you're relinquishin, cuz all the heat you bring, I'm extinguishin...

Holla at me.

* left out the world "ploys" on accident, ma bad.

not to bad but could use some improvement in its flow and wordplay but can u hit dis up wit a fair vote.....
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=125521

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