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Old 06-05-04, 03:23 AM   #1
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From: colorado,Ft.Morgan
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yo as i have one more to give my life is runnin on empty so i refeal the clip to the top plottin names as i go by foos start to drop im wiritn choruses through out my verbal scripts got life turned around and flipped my motto shed more blood than krip hits but it has to change one day bout to take anothers life

and its strange sip the dahm p as it floats away holdin my head up tryin to maintain as i watch grow up in a early stages tryin to live but dont have the money wadges so to us gettin paid is mo money mo problems as we travel through different phases

member back in the day low top adidas with out the laces nowadays to many racists gotta set things into there places now aint the time to pass the station throuhg our eyes time is waisten to much violence homies get wasited

keep on ya feet and on track bout to kill yaself cuz u realized u loved someone who didnt love you back kids pick on u in school just cuz ya gear didnt match didnt do so good when moms past got bad grades through out all ya classes just one more chance is all im askin
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Old 06-06-04, 10:17 AM   #2
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erm..im not feeling dis..lines are way to long..vocab is nice...but structure was wack and rhyme scheeme is al so wack..ok for a newb...eveluate....
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