top priority//
vacate buildings of multi stories//
suburian gansta, drinkin cristale wit my forties//
neighbors done stole my glory//
black man wit money, they had to report me//
My nana scared out her mind screamin, "oh lordie"//
still stuck as a ghetto child//
white kids runnin wild//
even though I`m livin it up, my skins still foul//
resortin to my old rules//
my belts full of tools//
tryna get this white off my head like selsun blue//
wat else is new//
dark is evil, looked down upon//
statistic misfit, askin niggas to pass the grey puopon//
always called me crazy one//
but I think they wrong//
disciplinin kids, I won`t raise a crazy son//
who buildin bombs//
enroll in school just to use sum guns//
if I were you, first I`d would fix my probs//
before you point a linger finger//
my emotions exist, I just control my anger//
sceptic spectics, my color means danger//
who are you to judge and shyt//
most of u are atheist//
the other percentile are catholic hypocrits//
your far from innocent//
nothings a incident//
play wit fire and get burned like a cigarette//
but ya hold me down//
want me to sell out, a phony clown//
dressed in black face, the next collin powell//
waitin for me to kill my brother//
eliminate the existance of a million brothers//
and you seal ya cover//
make the children wonder//
anyone that oppose is a nigga lover//
B.C. species//
slavery only released me//
but we still bound, livin in ya feces//
under a glass ceiling, we never really reach the top//
booby trapped world, we always seem to drop//

That was nice man... I really digged it.

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Elevate Kiid...

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not liking not enough words in each line to make a punch and shit

~I'm Out~

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You Have Potential Though.. Just Elevate.. Kiid!!!

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yo that was tight i was feelin it

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RIDE OR DIE

sucked.

shut uo g u suck ballz homo yo will i was feelin it dagw for realz

note: at least tell the kid what he needs to work on...shit, anyways u doin ur thing, it was good for what it was, a scene, this shit made me picture me about 7 years ago,this was a good piece in the fact that it wasnt a battle.......it set up the setting and the visual as a good story, sound like a over rebelious teen tryin to get at ur parents......

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i wasnt liken it just elevate man

peace