everyday i tell myself what i'm i doing loveing you,
thinking and thinking but still i don't have a clue
i don't even know how stuck to my heart like glue,
probably i was a sucker of you saying your loving was true,
but still i think it's better if we were made in to two,
because your love is playing me like a fool,
would of never have thought that you would be the one,
you don't even deserve to have my heart won,
but you constantly told me that i was like a beautiful swan,
when i felt like an ugly duckling,
now that you hurt me all you could do is sit back chuckling,
or making me feel like a young infant suckling,
but i garentee you no more night dreaming of you with my pillow cuddleing,
now you know loving you is one thing i hate
i getting smarter each day i realize more and more i could hold my weight,
understanding better that you just use me like i was some kind of bait,
now i know that all you are is just a mistate,
well you no long have what my heart had for store,
now your were something that didn't exist like metaphor
now get out of my life and for now and forever more

i was feelin dat tru feelings behind it nothin more keep doin what ya doin and stay safe~one~

hey thanks alot i would really apperiate if any body else sends a feed back

ay...good poem kidd....alot of feelin an emotion went in to dat piece...keep umm comin...peace

thanks alot dude your a good writer yourself one mexican to another

that was really good you had nice depth & emotion that was truly amazing...

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that was good man, your heart was pourin out,i like that stuff, was a nice poem....

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This wuz pretty good- lotta feelin... good job--- 1

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thanks everyone i really apreciated it, it means alot to me

that poems was really good i liked it alot i know how you feel and it's cool cause your from central cali also

nice poem keep up the good job

ur shit was tight i liked it

pretty nice...Nothing more then emotion and a tiny bit of vocab. 6.5/10

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