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06-25-04, 03:43 PM
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Thank You
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To you i was you're real son, never any question...
You've been here for me, to hear me out, and send me blessins... I had many expectations, and i garuntee you met that... So amazing to me, more of a dad, then a stepdad... Im glad i never had to call you by youre first name... The day i found out you werent my dad was my worst day... But now im glad, cause it just made me respect you more... Makes me wonder what i ever had to check you for... The was never a difference, when youre son was born... When i was in pain, you were the one to morne... I truly think that you're the reason that im still alive... When you told me advice, i was never ill advised... When something was hard, you gave me the will to try... My real dad ran out on me at three... But you took the duties of a dad on so easily... You stuck with my mom, poor with two kids... I bet everyone was telling you for sure youre stupid... You loved me like a real son, and punished me also... But you made sure that im not a human thats awful... We've had dissagreements, and ive probly told you i hate you... But for everything youve done for me, i love you, thank you... |
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06-25-04, 04:28 PM
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The Epitome Of Greatness
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IP:
another good open mic by you anxiety this was very good....the emotion was definately there....and it brung of sense of imagery and impact to your verse....the wordplay was once again topnotch and the structure was pretty good and only choppy in a couple areas...nice consistency and realness...good open mic
overall: 8.8/10 nice piece ~!1!~
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06-25-04, 08:05 PM
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O.wning Y.ou D.aily
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IP:
You seem to bring a lot of emotion in your verses. I liked the flow on this one a lot better. Good content and delivery. You seem to have a knack for this, keep it up
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06-25-04, 08:09 PM
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IP:
Thanks for the posotive feedback, keep it comin...
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06-25-04, 10:50 PM
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IP:
Ayo Forreal Mayn That Shit Was On Point...
Nice Even Flow, Easy To Read... REEEEAAAAL Deep Subject Wich Makes It All The Better To Read... This Was A Topic I Can Relate To Also So I Understood Where You Were Comin From... My Favorite Line Was... We've had dissagreements, and ive probly told you i hate you... But for everything youve done for me, i love you, thank you... Basic Line But That Shit Just Got At Me For Some Reason... Nice Drop Mayn Mos Def... ~One~ |
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06-25-04, 10:57 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP:
yeah nice shit man fa real lot's of emotion pc
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06-26-04, 06:34 PM
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IP:
Uppin
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