S'up all...any feedback appreciated, this is like an intro track or some shit coz i aint any idea who's who around here or what so I might aswell let myself be known...(altho seems like newbs in open mic don't get on to much with the likes of the open mic king....heh lets see...)..this is just to reflect some of the stuff I've read around here up to yet, and the small amount of it that I reckon doesn't deserve a "post" button...

MrChu verbally throwin it to ya'
I'm putting the chu in lyrically mature,
feels good to be kickin it up in here,
it'll feel better to paint your face with fear,
this could feel bitter sweet like the verve,
but i'd rather make it sour and hit a raw nerve,
problem with some of these tards is the learning curve
could be str8 and thier brain still wudnt serve
so i'll substantiate, to elaborate,
make your understanding inflate,
so you don't have ta make ya synapses mastabate,
your intellect is below the likes of me
like saddam taking on the US army
you cannot harm me or dissarm me
cuz i'll spit explode untold verses
till your only friends are the god damn nurses
suppose your used to explosions and spitting
fuck that tho, swallowing be more fitting

enough of the low level diss routine,
i'm warmed up now feelin like a microphone fiend,
time to paint you with a peripheral metaphor,
your like the puppy people dont want no more,
u cant stop comin out with this yappy bullshit,
so im'a use a belt n throw a hateful hit,
with the organic belt dats in my mouth,
the kind bitches like to feel down south,
while i verbally whip you with this venomous tongue,
you'll realise contraception wouldn't of been wrong,
oh for sure your father wanted to shoot,
but he shoulda missed the hole like the wrong note on a flute.

metaphor and rhyming aside,
I'm posting this intro with alotta pride....

to you other newbs i turn my head,
to you vets i shake ya hand,
to you newbs im leavin ya for dead,
to you vets i wanna invade ya land.
that's me out, remember this is just one fat generalisation i aint pretending its totally real n applies 2 alll, but you all know there's stuff here thats good n stuff here thats bad, I'm just tryin to break this newbie mould and see what you all think.

btw dont usually like explanin lines coz it feels like i be patronising, BUT

"this could feel bitter sweet like the verve,
but i'd rather make it sour and hit a raw nerve,"

a band called the verve did a fairly well known song called bittersweet symphony..dno how well its known in the US of A tho.

It was aight, at least you didnt talk about fake shit... Found it a little hard to follow the flow at some parts. A piece of advice, try to make your lines the same number of syllables...

sweet, cheers, bein from the uk and all havin the complete anti-rap accent the flow suffers but it aint nothing that cant b worked on