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07-03-04, 10:14 PM
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rap about anger
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Wordkillazrep da wings
  everyday i wake up and smoke up choke up me and my bitch just broke up. i spit majical rhymes commit trajical crimes im a crack head but i dont snort lines. my bling is enough to make you blind ill lose my mind and kick yo behind. im the crudest the rudest mutha fucka that you have heard from youll still be afraid even though i dont own a gun. me and the mic are one im like the white big pun nigga betta run when i put the 9s in da chamber your words get lamer Cuz: im a bit sicka than a nigga wit a nine beretta your rhymes is dope but mines are betta atleast wit my vocab i can pronounce every letta. peace out |
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07-03-04, 10:19 PM
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not bad.work on dat structure though.6.5/10
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03-08-05, 04:13 PM
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thanx dawg that makes me feel good man battle me yo dawg
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03-08-05, 05:04 PM
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E-Style, Bitch.
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lol u voted an said ''i suck give up at rapping''....an thats what u got?
lol............ typical canadian *shake my head*
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03-08-05, 05:06 PM
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E-Style, Bitch.
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i spit majical rhymes commit trajical crimes im a crack head but i dont snort lines.
^^^^ LMAO Da fuck is that? a nine beretta your rhymes is dope but mines are betta atleast wit my vocab i can pronounce every letta. ^^^ your feeding off 50 an in the worse way imaginable ''at least with my vocab i can pronounce every letta'' ^^^ hahahahah, give up kid, go back too playing tennis an golf.... my bling is enough to make you blind ill lose my mind and kick yo behind. ^^^^ please tell me your not serious????????? rest aint even worth commenting on 2/10 give up you suck no hope for you please vacate the site an never return Oh an leave feedback on Intermentals peice, thanks Peace out
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03-08-05, 05:30 PM
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in your system
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yeah, you gotta work on your structure and flow....alot of that is coming across really choppy/hacked because your forcing alot of words and stretching lines.....you wanna try and make things flow smoothly to enhance the reader's experience...nah mean? so work on that, and your vocab and wordplay could be uppped a little too, don't write so 'gangsta' either...haha, you had some nice ideas in there, but you just need some more work with writing...yeah, so keep it up 5/10
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