you no the rules
10-15 lines
your first
no running or i will haunt you down lol

*Yawns* My Lyrics r labled danger/Snipe u shall see
I'ma Murda u like dem 2 Niggaz that Merked in Washington D.C.
I've been gone fo a while, but now i'm Back
Word's flying at you, WARNING!!! You've entered my trap
N accepted my challenge, nigga u done
Best chance shoot at me wit a cyber gun
Cause u aint goin merk shit, I got the upper hand bitch
with the name sniper you would think shoot to kill
but i'ma hard target/we'll see yo blood spill
U getting hurt, Bra, bess lay back
Cause u might be a sniper, but i got the mack 10 loaded ready to splat

it was cute but weak nigga when i got a sniper your mac 10 ain't even gonna see me.lol but ok
ill spit soon

hahha u would have to aim i wouldn't

real nigga don't want to mess with the fucking best//
one bar and i got this nigga screaming S.O.S.//
i got the sniper rifle and my eye on the scope and it aimed at dark//
you raps is like a car they trying to go but it still in park//
but i think you can rap (what he says) "you do?!?" nope//
my rap will put you in jail dropping the soap//
i got the gun and you better believe it even if you ain’t seen it//
cause this bullet will have you puking blood like you bulimic (eating decease may be spelled wrong)//
you may be dark but my scope can still find you//
with a bullet that will pop up at you like boo//

it is what it is my first battle.
still enough to rip this nigga

Dark you had good flow and structure some of your punches were good but they werent that good.

sniper your flow was a lil off but not to bad structure was their and your punches hit harder. you got my vote

vote-sniper

i was feeling sniper moreit was funny but i think you better at open mics

opener: darrk
closer: no one
punches: sniper but very weak
personal: sniper
complexity: sniper
flow: sniper
style: both

vote sniper

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darrk, first bar had too many syllables, should of used a filler word with less syllables then put D.C.. 2nd bar was just self glorification, no real punch there. 3rd bar... cyber gun? thats a bit childish in my opinion.. 4th bar didnt even finish and that messed the structure a bit.. 5th bar was more self glorification.. 6th bar was stretched to all shit, and way too much filler.

sniper, first bar was didnt flow amazingly, but it worked, had a an alrite punch (not amazing tho).. the second bar was average, sort of worked, the punch was ok.. 3rd bar i dont no what u ment by (what he says) but the rhyme scheme worked, and there was a punch. the 4th bar was ok again, finished with a decent punch, and the closer was a bit weak.

basically, both of u need to elevate, but sniper won the battle because he just had some punches.. and less self glorification..

return the favor on one of the battles in my sig....

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yo sniper your pretty good, you won this battle, you had better punches and since this is a battle i got to give it to you.

dark yours was ok, your flow and structure was good but u just didnt come ass hard

vote- sniper

ok check it:
DARRK:you had a decent verse, your flow was good, but it seemed u felll off a bit at the end,closer didnt rhyme,but decent overall..
SNIPER: you had a good verse, your flow was good, you came harder than darrk, and some of your lines were funny, u definitaly have a style and thats good..
VOTE:SNIPER

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