lil something new for me but you know i got the balls to try it look at my "i'm a terrorist " you dont need to post feed back , but if you do, give me an honest opinion or tell me what you thinkin but back to this...

this girl caught me right off the back
i thought she was fine
right height body was off the hook
from the start i didnt make it known
i let her know i was into this other chick
said she was somewhat of a friend
but it was all jus a lil something
to see if i was into you
a few weeks later and a couple days
i realized what i was missing
baby can i get a number? i'll promise to call
your one step ahead of the others
chase been set up now its my turn for the run,

all i been is stuck on you (all about this chick)
past days its been you girl
i havent talked to you in a day and i'm already going
to lose it mmmmmmm bump the beat up while i hit this
second round i'll talk some more blah blah
bout the shit before(all about this chick)

from the facts to fictions the last girl
she was always bitch'n
came to the realiziation she was gonna be ditch'n
finally with out the warning but a few fights
we seperated and i watched her leave
but the next few months
i came around to the evidence
i would never be a permant resident
i know you went to the club but i gots a new girl
5'7 chocolate , really bangin
sexy unbelievable ,

all i been is stuck on you (all about this chick)
past days its been you girl
i havent talked to you in a day and i'm already going
to lose it mmmmmmm bump the beat up while i hit this
second round i'll talk some more blah blah
bout the shit before(all about this chick)

Hmmmmm, this was interesting, i liked it but you had no real flow or rhyme scheme, but then again its an open mic and shit happens, BTW, were you drunk or hittin the water bong when you wrote this? Not dissin just curious, it seems like you were just rollin through, and what was with the blah blah blahsss, this piece was different and good in a spoken word kinda way, again not dissin you man........................peace

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